All Comments on 'Sex Store Surprises'

I was so disappointed when this ended! Very hot. Looking forward to your next installment!

A little choppy to read. And the ending just fell off a cliff. This felt more like an opening paragraph than a first chapter. Just not enough here.

Awesome first submission! Can't wait for the next installment.

And thank you for having the courage to take the plunge and post here. I enjoyed this very much, especially as it was your first submission, and I would like to read more. I hope you get lots of stars and positive comments -- and try to ignore the negative ones; the best advice I can give you is to remember that you can't please everyone -- and it's folly to try.

You certainly pleased me with this one, however -- well done -- five stars.

Loved your story. Please write more

Loved the inage of her touching her own breasts!

very good beginning I'm looking forward to whatever is up stairs

Enjoyed your first submission and hope you continue. Only thing I might suggest is take your time, although this is an erotica site, it's ok to wait to get to the sex to set things up. Most of the people who read my stuff have cautioned me on the same so I know how you feel. This was quite good!

I like erotica written by female authors because those stories tend to tell me something about female sexuality, kind of an inside view.

You have made this girl seem very innocent despite having had sex. Daniel works in the store for just reasons like this. Her fantasies have her prepped for this. You really should finish this story. JudyLee

the suspense makes the story for me, not the quick sex. so keep the slow erotic writing you started out with, all through the next 5 chapters, this is great.

Please continue in love 😍😍

Fantastic start can’t wait for the next session