by Fraysonid
Good start to a story, the only thing critical I have to say is that the chapters are way too short. I'm not saying go crazy with 8 or 9 pages, but 3 or 4 pages would be a lot better and would probably get you more views, and better ratings.
this was a decent start to the story. A fantastic premise and flowed awesomely. Would love to read the next chapter.
My curiousity is piqued. There are quite a few directions you can go with this. Hope they are good . Don't fly through the scenes though
Great job! The plot intrigued me I have to admit, and I hope you will continue this story.
I am very curious as to where you will go with this. What significance do the two different sides of the necklace play? Which side went against his body? More please.
You have a very good story line to tell. Don't let it hang. keep on writing
I like where this could potentially go. Like the other commenter I'm not as much for m+m but the incest and orgy potential is off the charts!
Will read next chapter. Not looking forward to mc being with other guys. Will not read after tht
This is the beginning to a wonderful story. I look forward to reading more and hope that the plot thickens.