All Comments on 'Shipwrecked in Paradise'

Good start, I hope that this is only the first chapteFlr ...

Great premise. Decent start. But just awful in the end.

What improvements should be made for the future installments?

It was sort of like you gave up and decided to rush to the sex. There must have been more to explore. You also switched perspectives a couple of times. I liked it at the start, but that was when it was rich in details. Those dropped off toward the end.

Consider this: people can read all sorts of stories. However, these stories are erotic, implying that they are focused around sexual topics. Make your sex scenes longer.

hope there is more to come

Needs more sex. We do not come to this site to read mainstream stuff.

Really like the concept but I agree with the other commenters...the sex scene felt rushed. More sex next time, please!

Trying to track 8 charactersfor a paragraph of poorly written sex?

Illiterotica?

Its a rape story? Yeh, right good job. NOT!

Too short; and this was only the first night, Will there be swapping or just whoever is horny fucks?