by flash87
This story fills me with anticipation! The pacing is great. I hate to be that guy, but you need to use double quotation marks when someone speaks.
There's so little detail because he's blindfolded. He cant see the room hes in. Hot though.
Thank you for sharing your story with us and please write more -- it was very good indeed. Five stars from me -- and thanks again!
This was a great start. It could have used a bit more detail and a bit more length but still a great start for a first? submission. Please continue.
Thank you for writing and posting here.