by exhibitionistgirl
I thought your characters were written really well, and the dialogue and sexy descriptive language felt natural. And fuck, it was hot. You might want to look more into what counts as a "slow burn" tho. Lmao Also, wouldn't mind more "convincing" style seductions for the younger two, like Carter implied. Just one reader's thoughts.
Great story to jerk off to. Kinda silly, but it's fantasy. I suspect mom and dad are siblings so go ahead and spill those beans when the other kids joking the family "fucktacular"
I look forward to the next chapter!
Great story, worth more chapters. About the rest of the trip, and adding to rest of the family.
Can't wait for a summet of pleasure.
Hurry with the next chapter 9