All Comments on 'Smile, You're on TV'

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liz33ndliz33ndover 8 years ago
spelling... so what

Great story, I could picture this in real life. Part two would work for me. Especially if the mole on Gary's hand was the same as on the store video. Ha ha.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Really!

Spelling, grammar, really! When I want perfect spelling and grammar I buy a book.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Don't Trust Spellchecker

You need to do your own proofreading. Just as your title used the wrong word, itself an actual word--but not the one your wanted, Anon also used the wrong word for blackmail. You also had a sentence with "nor ... he didn't" which thereby became a double negative. Nevertheless, your story was erotic and do keep going with it. But you do need to justify a "friend" taking such liberty with a "friend's" wife without getting punched out, if only at the end when he threatened them with the second video.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Nightmare

This turned into an absolute nightmare. Blackmale of the worst kind.

hannsghannsgover 8 years agoAuthor
So much for Ginger as a spelling/grammar checker

So much for using Ginger as a spelling/grammar checker. Ran it through 3 times and it didn't find mistakes, neither did ms word.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Not too bad a story ...

... but YOU'RE spelling sucks ;( Three -- you can do better than this, surely.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Misspelling in the title

You're, not your. As a writer this is a near unforgivable mistake. Their our other various mistake throughput you're story. See how annoying it is?

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All through school I hated English class and writing stories was painful. Now I am writing stories for pleasure and wished I would have paid attention in class.