All Comments on 'Sports Bar Pickup Ch. 01'

by victory_4_val

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AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Darn good start...

keep up the fine work; I want to hear more.

And where is that bar - maybe I will come find you, and her, too.

bornagainbornagainover 17 years ago
A Great beginning

A great start lets read more The bar scene was great how big was Taras breasts and Kims breasts ?

Pat

Atlanta,Ga.

jakebarnes06jakebarnes06over 17 years ago
Nice

Val:

One story; one victory. Well done.

-- One of the "pretty shady looking older guys"

CaptivesubtoyCaptivesubtoyover 17 years ago
Waiting with baited breath for more!

Wanted to read on and was sad to see it is part 1 only!

duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
A little Friday night Action!

Tara moves to New York and finds things very dull. Determined to find some Friday night action she goes out to a Sports Bar and while there meets Kim. Soon the two find the common thread and pursues their choice of sexual activities.

Good Read! Well Written!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Good start to a promising story

An extremely well written start to what must become a exciting fantasy of 2 women's lust for fulfillment. i like the end as it leaves room for so much more rather than being hastily finished.

Congratulations. A+++++++++++++

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
More please

Wow, really promising start... and I'm sorry that there's not more now, but I'll wait...

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Iffy

There were brief glimpses of promise in this, but it was mostly another story of two girls walking into a bar. Not very imaginative.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
So what happens next?

Please include a small amount of domination... a bit of being tied up.. fisting and rimming. My beautiful blonde girlfriend had an affair with a dominating dyke and would come home and tell me what they did... I would love to relive those moments..

do tell

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Excellent

Good start, can't wait to see what happens

Anonymous
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