All Comments on 'Starting Over Ch. 02'

Not impressed.... this one is too cheap.... mental wanderings of a sexually deprived person. All whores expect maybe Abbi. If me, I would cancelled the lease, legally of course - rape the charge, plus the danger all would be revealed to the authorities. He was no better then the wife he just left......

need to try writing about something more realistic. TK

TheKeith is writing my life story!

Fiction, to be enjoyed, needs some realism: this story has none from first page to last. Science fiction, humor or satire, or some other label allows lots of leway so to enjoy this story i will label it humor.

Dream!

Try again, take some time to develope the characters please.

Don't rush to get something out. Take your time and develop the story. Very short, one note chapters are frustrating to us as we try to get into your characters.

Two stories read.

Thank you for the work, but nothing happened but a thoroughly contrived orgy.

I like a bit more in my story

How bad is this 'writer'. Constant less than one page chapters, seems like he wants to be like spammualx, or maybe he is spammuelx? None of his stories have any substance, they're all rubbish.

First his wife gang fucks others, now he moves to a complex where the women gang fuck him. I say again. Huh?

This was a sex-themed story. For those who still want wall-to-wall ultra-graphic sex on every page, I ask that you get a life. For those who are easily offended because I didn’t write exactly what you wanted to read, I’ll say the same thing. I also observe that the people expressing the worst, nasty, most virulent comments have—with few exceptions—either posted as anonymous or have never published a story under their screen names. Reading such comments is pointless.

A midwesterners fantasy of what life is like in a California Beach town? Do some research. San Diego is a Navy town with a LOT of immigrants. Rents are high and anything remotely close to the beach is expensive with a capital "E". Single, sex crazed women don't fill the rooms and come out during the day to suck and fuck around the pool. They either go to school or to work. This chapter really didn't advance the story line. It was simply some random suck and fuck. Even a guy from the midwest knows he should "not be a fool and wrap his tool". This was just worthless.

@Anonymous (11/18/18)

It's a fantasy, which is why he can find an affordable apartment in a complex full of horny strippers that's near the beach in San Diego. Let your willing suspension of disbelief out to play and enjoy the ride.

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First part was decent but this was a joke of a story.