by baccgirl
This had me absolutely dripping wet. So concise and to the point! I have read all of your stories, and they all seem to have one common thread...quick and to the point! That is what it is all about! Keep up the great work! Your prose is quite unique and refreshing! I love the different locations each of your stories have...what an imagination!!
Strip Poker was the first story I read after joining Literotica earlier today, and some of the previously posted comments make it sound like it may have been the first story you posted. If even 10% of the stories on this site are as good as this one, I've found a home! Hope you write many more!
Not bad for a first story - made me wet !!! Every guys fantasy to have a girl do what they want. Thanx nice job
Try using more direct words, something more down to earth next time - spices it up
But very well done. I usually like things more on the darker side, but this was nicely put together.
And would love to read more from this obviously sensuous and articulate author!
And would love to read more from this obviously sensuous and articulate author!
Very promising: your emphasis on mood and description made for a memorable - if brief - slice of erotica. The only mis-step was the title, which is all too familiar in these parts and hints at a far more formulaic tale.
Great first effort! Keep up the good work and we look forward to reading about what happens when SHE wins!
Absolutely amazing short story! I can't wait to read other stories you may have!!!
I posted a new story review of this promising debut in the New Stories Review Thread of the Author's Hangout of Lit Forums.
Great job! Super vivid and erotic, you can feel the chemistry and passion! Very well done!
I think this is a very good submission for a first story.
If this author decides to continue to submit stories she may want to consider longer stories with more detailed character descriptions, details, etc.