All Comments on 'Suburban Wife Ch. 03'

This is all about turning him into a WACC

Or just another submissive CC

kelly has moved on, and now sees john as nothing but furniture

next will be john getting fucked up the ass

I loved this chapter and cannot wait for the next!

You lost your wife moron. Nice vacation right. Typical cuck garbage. Cleaning out your wife after?...... Yuk! John you have been neutered.

How did John become a wimp bisexual, licking cum out of his wife's pussy? This was totally out of character based on what we know about him from earlier parts. Was he drugged somehow? This story would fit better in a different category. Since there is no "wimp, cuckold, creampie" category, suggest Fetish in the future. Kelly is certainly not a loving wife. One star.

What does John get out of this? Except to clean out his wife after having sex with the servants. Fetish author Fetish.Right down the rabbit hole. Why?

The author is turning a man, who has a healthy sense of self-respect into a WACC and a pr iouly loving wife into a mindless bimbo who sees a cock and no matter who is watching or where they are, must fuck it.

Because that is so realistic, I see women on the subway giving head because cum is so sweet. The author is a complete moron. This story should t be edited, it should be in Non-Erotic.

Author changed john's character and values at a drop of a hat. Needs to be consistant with the profile of each character. John would have gotten up from lounge, make statement to Kelly, and then leave Kelly once she said she was goinv to fuck the servants. From there the plot develops to you does want.

Not really sure why some people leave negative comments about a story that reflect the fact they shouldn't be reading it anyway. Same type of moron that would watch a train wreck and then walk away only to decide after the fact that they are weak and pathetic. Now to your story. Really enjoyed it. Keep them coming. You will only get better at writing the more you do it and I for one will be reading. And those that criticize the writing... Start posting your work so we can see how perfect you are.

This story couldve been okay with the couple turning to an open marriage, maybe playing at the mistress thing but u turned it to cuck shit, too bad. There is zero basis in their lives for either of the couple giving into this behaviour. A massage doesnt warrant a blow job for a stranger in public. Straight guys dont eat the cum of another guy who just participated in his unplanned marriage betrayal. While i'm at it, i doubt very much that u can unknowingly book a week at a private spa that has a kinky sex theme.. Either it's Hedonism 3 or its not. Sorry but the bullshit meter is off the charts for a good LW story. And if the women LOVED giving head, they'd look like it wouldn't they, not some disinterested gaze,i know the look on my wifes face shows passion and determination as i blow a load in her mouth. And since when does a leather wearing Dom give a shit about regularly blowing her wimp boytoy?

Somehow this went straight off the rails. The fact that he maintained a hard on is irrelevant. Why would he be so anti wife/servant coupling in the beginning and just watch as not one but two had their way with his wife. Then with no real force eat the cum out of her? I thank you for sharing your writing with us but I have to agree, this one somehow flipped into something completely different.

It's been said this story went ...." Off the rails " in the narrative. I'm afraid I'd have to agree. You haven't constructed enough of a background vibe to allow it to slide into a full blown cuckold story like it did. You had both parties against such activity on minutes prior and zero meaningful communication. Literally it was .. Just ok with a bit too much of the machine gun third view narration going on without much description or dialog. The concept of the first chapter had promise but its now veered off into very unrealistic territory. Try making things more realistic , just because its fantasy and fictitious doesn't mean it can't be believable at the same time. I think this story has gone off a bit far to be pulled back but for your next story try to keep it real and your results will be much improved.

The story is moving along ok. The clues are not very subtle: both victims are behaving way out-of-character. Even John is asking John "what the hell is going on?".

I'm looking forward to whatever Anne has planned when John revolts.

More, please.

Resolver

Loved it. Loved him licking her pussy clean after being fucked twice. Kept my cock hard and dripping. Please keep it up and so will I. And love jerking off to it

I like the overall storyline but it feels rushed. It would be much more enticing to develop the interplay between the couple themselves and with their hosts. Also, slowing down to include more detail on everything would help to build the environment and the relationships, and add time for the anticipation to build. I'd be very interested in reading more, especially if what currently takes place on 2 pages was instead played out over 4-5 pages. All the characters seem like they could have rich stories and motivations, and I'd like to see that explored. Keep the writing coming!

I like your story ,don't listen to people who don't know a good story for what it's worth. Please continue this series,but don't make him a cuckhold to his wife. I would like to see both of them having fun exploring their bi sexuality.

I don't think so. 1* Unrealistic at best. Why would John put up with this? BTW I see this story appeals to people that call themselves pantywearer. How nice

This story is total B.S. No normal straight guy would ever submit to any of this crap without a fight. As said earlier how do you go from the dilemma of not being able to have children to randomly hooking up with a Dom. There is no background that the couple had any sub tendency before the supposed NORMAL vacation. The author has some talent writing but has no idea of how to develop a consistent story without changing the characters values and confusing the story.

from reading this. I don't understand why they read this so they can just make negative comments about it. I'm loving it. As I said yesterday, different strokes for different folks! I would clean up a cream pie. I'd clean up my own. Lots of guys want the woman to swallow. I think if you expect her to swallow, you should be willing to do the same. To me, it just tastes like egg whites. The only thing I'm waiting for is for John to get some action from Trish or Anne or Julia. If Trish had been holding my erect cock while Kelly was being taken care of, I would have eaten her and fucked her. John needs to loosen up and get some new nookie. I'm looking forward to more of this tale. This would be my dream vacation. I would have not ever put any clothes on once I found out total nudity was acceptable and would have fucked someone other than Kelly by now. I think this is 5-star stuff! This is a site for fantasy and not necessarily reality. I'd like it to be real but can enjoy it just as a dream.

Well I only wore panties once in my life, and that was at my wife's request.But reading this story, a perfect five in every way by the way, is so try hot. I imagine myself in this situation. Loved that she was sucked and fucked by the help. And that he cleaned up after. I know twice when that has accidentally happened to me and it is so embarrassingly hot. Jeanne, my wife, lose and is faithful to me, but on two occasions she's strayed. In both cases I cleaned up the mess if yo know what I mean. I love her, and this series is so hot.

at least get some strange!

Your writing is excellent and the sex was hot but I just hope John grows some balls in the next chapter. Maybe I see him being so shocked at her actions and turned on by Anne and Trisha playing with him that he froze and let it happen but I can't buy him being led meekly over to kneel down and clean her out.

The trolls who go out of their way to bash writers need to get lives. Their goal is to bring down the the ratings and to draw attention to themselves.

This series was beautifully written and I found it to be extremely erotic. I loved the way the author took his time building up the sexual tension and was able to express how both of the spouses felt.

Good stuff. Can't wait to read more

Awaiting more!

so far so good, wonder where this will go next ? will he be controlled and formally cucked or ???

Thanks for sharing/

great story well written but what is next ??

Yeah right. No way... Pack and leave her. Divorce. Naw... Bullet between the sluts eyes. Need to get medieval on Anne's ass.