All Comments on 'Sunset and the Husband's Kiss'

But it's also written terribly. You do not have two people speak in the same paragraph. That's 3rd grade english!

No comments needed...2nd time today...It's self explanatory...1*

Why is this here? 1 star and hope you learn to write a story and not a poor excuse for a scene. Bah!!

they are so damn sexy! Gave you a 51

i really enjoyed this story! if only it were longer, i really hope there is more and this becomes a series. i love the wimpy husband down on his knees for his wife's feet. i hope to see more foot worship and more cuckold humiliation for him in the next story :)

You are really Vastiesmith2 or Sweetjane316.

Because this really, really, really sucks.

Hope there's more

If someone tried to treat me that way I would of thrown them off the cliff

Author. Are you so stupid that you don't understand the difference between a Loving Wife story and a fetish story? This was poorly conceived and so badly written that I'm amazed that you bothered to post it. And Vastiesmith2 understood it SO well that the stupid broad gave it a 51. Talk about a dumb troll! We're all laughing at your story and vastie's stupidity. Look at the score. I'm amazed it's even above a *1*.

stupid dear annony, you keep on reading these LW stories and hating them So who is more dumb....YOU!! by a land slide. gave it a 5

Mostly, just more shit.

beat the shit out of that whore, damage her face and leave her penniless and homeless to watch the sunset.

Wrong Category 1* and I wish I could give you less. We really need a negative voting option on Lit.

I'll bet you are a real stud, right pony boy.

Are you really comparing yourself with Dylan Thomas?

I gave it a 5 to help your score. LEW stories are so fucking hot!!

My Dear Anonymous,

You remind me of some of the first readers of Swift's Gulliver's Travels, who on reading the story of Lilliputians and Brobdingnagians, started writing posts questioning the veracity of the narrative. Truth is not a maiden with a simple or a single face.

For those who question the category, perhaps you did not bother with the associated tags to the story. For the future, it is my request, please desist from visiting my posts. We never go in a restaurant whose food we don't like, do we?

As for the objection regarding two or more people speaking in the same para, well that's too jejune to reply to, but still, my advise would be, read a little before posting acerbic comments on other people's works. Language is nobody's hand-maiden. A para may not merely have different people speaking, it may even emcompass different time-worlds, or different phases of consciousness, or moving from one person's consciousness to another's.

My sincere thanks to all who have liked my work. Please keep reading. There's more to come.

This sounds like a great date. I don't need her to have a boyfriend but I would love to be her slave.

Good dialog, esp. How she had her slave hubby endure the pain for her sake. We all do this, just not dramatic. Wives can be assertive, but when we luv it their commands become exciting. I luv when my queen has me get up during the night to do some frivolous thing for her. Gets me hard for her. Keep up the good ideas and improve your writing!

Great story, loved it!

Next time you start having a fantasy like this, STOP and slap yourself on the face repeatedly and say aloud to yourself "I'm an idiot".