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I lean forward and flick the tip of her clit with my tongue. She lets out a surprised 'Ooh!' and looks down to see what's changed. I slowly insert another finger into her opening and continue my ministrations, now licking and flicking her clit and surrounds more aggressively. She starts moving her hips and I try use my shoulder and hand to hold her down a bit. "Oh God!" I hear breathlessly, as her panting picks up. I glance up and see her hands pulling at the sheets and her head turning from side to side. "Ah! Ah!" she pants. I increase my pace and force, knowing she's in the last stretch.
Suddenly she throws her head back, her back arches and she yelps, "Ah! Oh God! Jake! Oh- Oooh! Oh God!" as she begins coming on my hand and mouth. Her hips are bucking wildly while she's trapped my head between her thighs and I lose contact with her clit, my hand still trying to carry her through the orgasm. I stop as I'm sure she must be incredibly sensitive.
After a few more seconds she relaxes and taking deep breathes, while repeating "Holy shit, holy shit."
I look at the bed and there's a massive wet patch beneath her. "Should have gotten a towel I guess" I think in hindsight.
I watch with a smile on my face, satisfied I did my beautiful sister justice. She's almost glowing as she lies there. Eventually she looks up. "That was incredible... Thank you big brother."
She lies still for another minute before her eyes spring open wide and she sits bolt upright, an expression of shock on her face before she starts laughing and jumps off the bed making for her door, talking over her shoulder.
"I was running downstairs to make sure dinner wasn't burning when I ran into you!"
I watch as her perfectly shaped ass disappears around the corner and fall onto my back.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 1 year agoI found very few things that I didn't like and all of them were very minor. On your next attempt, you might remember that first person doesn't really work in a story. It is a very small complaint and I mean it in a constructive way. The other thing is I am not a fan of using words and phrases that tell people where you are from. An example would be the word, costume for bathing suit and bum instead of butt or ass. I think most readers try and imagine themselves in the story and it makes it difficult when you pinpoint your location. It was obvious that you were either from Europe or Australia. Other than those two things, it was a great story.. I would love to read more.
Anonymousover 1 year agoSolid sexy writing! Everything completely believable. Please continue the story with more chapters. Loved it.
ScottishTexanabout 2 years agoThis is a great start to a longer story. I hope that you will write more about these characters soon. 4/5 because it's too short.
Anonymousover 2 years agoI sure hope the lucky bastard gets to blow a nut inside his little sister. Missionary, her legs spread wide and pinned to her shoulders
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoThe story was good but you need to learn a little more about structure. You can't seem to decide if you want to write in present or tell a story like it has happened. First person only works if you are telling about a dream. If You are telling about something that has supposedly happened, you should always speak in the past tense. By that you should be writing the story in the same style as how you would tell it to a friend. You would not use expressions like, I walk into a room and stare at her naked body. It should be, I walked into a room and stared at her naked body. When telling a story, always use past tense. One minor thing, you need to decide which country you are supposedly in. If you are in the US, it is ok to say 5 feet 5 inches, but anyplace else, use the metric system. In the US, we don't go on holiday, we go on vacation and we don't have a bum, we have a butt or an ass. A bum is someone who doesn't work and is down on his luck.
Anonymousover 6 years agoThis builds nicely, got me hard early and kept me there to the end. Great first story! I hope you write some more.
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoSome comments are certainly relevant about the grammar or style. But the most important is that the eyes flow over the text and pict come to mind. Nice pics.
So if you wanted to issue a sexy short story this is a success. Next would be to développement the story and characters.
Anonymousover 7 years agoPretty Darn Good... A few typos (a pet peeve of mine)... and a little more description of how the people felt when one did something to the other is suggested. A very good start of a nice series... Lets see where you take these two in the future please.
