All Comments on 'Tainted Ch. 01'

Great read so far....

Great start, keep it up, but please don't let us wait too long.

Didn't read something that says chapter one when the author isn't committed to actually finishing it from the start, it is YOUR story, tell it or don't bother, tired of newbies like you who say they will only continue if they get enough likes.

I think you have a good start here. There's some errors, but I can't fault that, my writing is hardly stellar. Anywho, I'd like to see more detail, as the pace seemed rather fast. Just slow the pace down slightly.

You've got a great start. I too am getting tired of new writers not committing fully to a story unless they get good reviews. All criticism, good AND bad, should help shape you into a better writer. Not everyone will like what or how you write, but you should keep going regardless. Now, having said that, I'd like to read more-- with more detail and a slightly slower pace--especially since you left us hanging. You might also wish to get a good editor to catch the few mistakes here and there.

Great story I'm hooked!

P.s. *sigh just another guy into big breasted blondes

Great start, looks like a good story is forming here! But, you have a lot of spelling issues. Get an editor please! And I can do it if you want, I have been editing for a few other authors here. Contact me if you want to discuss this.

I would love to read more! just don't make it too dark and sinister please. I just love happy-happy stories.

Ok, first of all, you've got to keep going. Second, please don't let us hanging like that too often. Cliffhangers are a killer when you've got so little going. In my opinion anyways. Thirdly, you need to check that spelling. And lastly, I understand your eagerness for reviews and comments, but I feel like I have to beg so I can read more. I find that very irritating. What you wrote so far is pretty compelling so be confident and keep on writing!

I agree it is compelling so yes keep it up.

Looking forward to more. Could you a touch more editing, but nothing is too distracting even as it is. Keep it up!

5 stars.

I enjoyed this a lot, you should keep going.

Keep writing man. U got me on edge here. Tht cliffhanger blows dude. Lol. U got a fan in me

NEW CHAPTER PLZZZZ. CAN'T WAIT ANYLONGER!!! Lol

Awsome! Great writing style and plot. Keep it up and more please.

Need more bro!!!

TSm, a good start to what I suspect could turn out to be a great series. So far you are showing good writing skills and a vivid imagination. Writing interesting characters and believable dialogue.

Create at your own speed. Till it satisfies your personal sense of achievement. I know all too well what a crazy-making bitch inspiration can be!

I have several novel-size story outlines facing me. Driving me up the wall cause I am having so much trouble pulling the story-arcs together into a coherent whole.

I have been slapped down recently by Real Life issues. That has provided me with some time for introspection. I have come to a decision.

Instead of trying to complete my novels, for which I failed at so far. I intend to cut out a section of the storyline. Enough to stand alone as a complete story and post it to Literotica that way.

If any of the portions receive a favorable popularity, than prioritize and concentrate on completing that specific work. See how it goes.

... Why would he just bounce like this?