All Comments on 'Taken to Elsewhere'

could use some more careful proofreading, and portion after blake wakes up for the last time feels...rushed, could do with a bit more time taken, maybe a little more exposition

Let me know if you ever want a proofreader, by the way. I really enjoy your work, but there are some mostly technical issues that can get in the way sometimes. Nice job here!

Lecherous from the get-go, I was bound to learn more about his situation as the story progressed. Peculiar, delicious, strange and entrancing. Thank you for the read, and keep up the writing.

If a person has loved such a story, like all barries they are broken.Loved it!

Thank you!!!

How's this. She climbs onto his lap and tries to force her nipple into his mouth, he bites it off and head butts her. End of story. Poorly thought out drivel.

1 star