All Comments on 'Taking It Off Paper'

No plot- no story line- poor writing- bad grammar- bad writer period!!

Misspelled words or wrong words altogether ruin this. Got about four or five paragraphs in before I quit reading

An editor would at least make it readable. The non-plot needs a rework. And the characters are just unlikable people. Try again.

The concept got my attention. Many women have rape fantasies, myself included, but spell check can go a long way and the grammar was atrocious. Almost any medium you use to write on will bring spelling and grammatical errors to your attention; why would you ignore them? It makes the story difficult and tedious to read and really takes away from the experience. Never mind that it could have been fleshed out and given much more detail - that is entirely secondary to the poor readability.

Too hard to read. Get an editor to help you.

Please do not submit anything else without a proofreader or editor. Obviously English isn't your primary language.