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All Comments on 'Taking On the Baseball Team'

by channellboy

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Just a couple of comments

1. Don't rush the story - too fast and it's just a mess

2. Please get an editor - just a few fixes would go a long way to a better story

camperguy123camperguy123about 9 years ago
Loved your story

Loved the story very much but after the baseball teams first go you ended the story very quickly. I can see many more chapters here.

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