All Comments on 'Taking What's His Pt. 01'

It is a commonplace story, it is well written, it could have potential but way too short to evaluate

There was no type of sex at all . Needed to be longer and have some form of sex

That's the difference between porn and erotica, one is strictly about sex and the other has something to say beyond being about just sex. I'm sorry one of the other commenters did not understand that. Your main male character's sexual inclinations/desires was clear, and that is enough for an intro. Other chapters could be longer, but this felt like a prologue, which does not have to be long. Regardless, first chapters are hard and it did what it was supposed to do, which was pique interest. I personally find the male pov in this type of story to be lacking so often, so I'm interested in where this is going.

I got a nice insight into the daddy characters thought process and cannot wait for more

Why does the female have to barely 5 foot? Tall girls are hot too. I'm just tired of reading: small girl, big ass shit....there are tons of stories like that. I hope you do better next time. Three stars so you learn long the way.

I made her that small because I am that small. Her body shape is my body shape. Why wouldn't I want to base my character off of myself? I don't find anything wrong with that. - The author

It's a good start to a story. I will echo what has already been said that it's too short to say if "good" overall or not, but that's for later.

And write your characters to how you want them. Small, large, whatever. Same with the plot. Something can be 99% sex, or 1% sex, and still belong here. This is fine.

Can't wait for the next episode.