All Comments on 'Tarial's Spark'

Well, it just sucked. Use a proofreader.

Yeah, I loved it. I fucking love Magic and this was just brilliant. Minor grammar errors. Some more, vivid, details would be good. Seriously, give me every raw, hot sensation you can, just don't be repetetive. If it takes a short paragraph to describe her orgasm, or the hard cock sliding into her, so be it. It ended rather abruptly which would have been fine, teasing even, if I could find a second chapter. Which I really think this story deserves.