All Comments on 'Telepath King Ch. 05'

This story is amazing! I love it as it keeps gaining more depth. Keep'em comin

This has a lot of potential to become a truly great anthology. BUT...

You need to work on your spell ing grammar. One persistant error you are making is with 'you're' - the contraction of 'you are' - and using it when you really should be using 'your'... I.e "this is your house", not "this is you are house".

Great story so far. One thing I noticed is that you had him copy peoples skills or abilities. You can use skills like language fairly easy but not phyical sills. Just because you know how to break a brick with your hand doesn't mean that you have the muscles and coordination to actually do it. It would be interesting to use thst in the story to take his ego down a notch.

Dan

this one already came out. why are you re-releasing it?

My favourite so far can't Waite to read the next chapter.

unless I have missed a few things, you are really glossing over some details. Thomas was supposedly broke and jobless when the story started. Shortly after that, without any apparent income he was allowing his ladies to shop on his dollar. He seems to have money always handy and I don't know what the source is?? Lynn

Story is getting pretty good