All Comments on 'Thank You, Babe'

by TheNewcomer

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dachshundboydachshundboyabout 6 years ago
Hot story, but could be improved by expanding on it

This feels like I'm reading a page 3 or so of a multi part story, like we just walked in during the middle of act 2. Would've loved to see how Jennifer and Tim met and got together in the first place, and a more in-depth account of the accident at landed him in the hospital, rather than an after-the-fact exposition dump.

That said, JLaw is always a win, and I'm now going to see what if any other stories you've written.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Unbelievable

I'm pretty certain that being in the hospital with an upper body cast, that Tim would have had a catheter in his penis. Just saying.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
It's good BUT

When is the next Rashida story coming?!

TheNewcomerTheNewcomerabout 6 years agoAuthor
Rashida

Didn't realize there was such a demand for Rashida! Definitely a motivator for that story line.

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