All Comments on 'Thank You Pt. 01'

Interesting. Good character development. At end of page 2 where she says no touching below the waist my first thought is Alisons a shemale? Be a different twist to the story I suppose. Looking forward to chapter 2.

You wrote:

"She rolled him over and climbed on top of him in the missionary position."

Woman On Top is definitely NOT the Missionary position.

Sort of hurts your credibility as a writer of erotica…

-Rei

and for what, TK U MLJ LV NV

Needs more development, Hopefully in chapter two and beyond, as this has huge potential, potential for more than a few twists, and turns.

North