All Comments on 'Thanksgiving Addiction Cure'

You've got a real knack with storytelling! The characters are totally believable and they actually have depth. There's growth, set backs, developments, interesting plot curves and all the other elements that make a damn good story.

The only thing you need to work on is spelling and grammar. I was able to read through virtually all mistakes, but it really does detract from the story. For some people, it might be enough turn them away from reading your otherwise amazing content. An editor/peer reviewer to look over your work for those errors is one way to get that fixed right up.

I realize I am being niggling here.... There are a few little grammatical errors, but not enough to take away from a marvelous story. Fantastic character development and plot. Clever furn of phrases throughout. A well done story that happens to have some smoking hot sex scenes, as opposed to a "sex story". I am enjoying "the read" as much as the "stroke factor". Not many stories on Lit I can say that about. Looking forward to "Christmas"!!

Well done.

A real good story I found it close to reality that is why I liked it very much and I want a sequel to the story and I want it quick

Liked it a lot, I just don't really understand why the sister or mother like him. Mother maybe I can understand but not the sister. Also I guess STDs don't exist in this world.... at least I hope not for Alice's sake

Please continue to write of this family. Maybe get Gary gang raped in prison.! Great job!!!