All Comments on 'The Accountant's Wife'

This was convoluted, intricately plotted, incredibly detailed, superbly written and masterfully edited. A real heavyweight of an epic tale. It doesn't get any better.

I was actually driving an SS jaguar last week, but unfortunately it wasn't mine. Swapped for my XK140 for the drive back from a meet, but unfortunately he wouldn't make the swop permanent. There were a number of other events in this story that resonated with me, and of course increased my enjoyment. Thanks ..... Lots of stars!

Great job! I think this was your best story yet. Really appreciate all the time you take to create what amounts to hours of Free QUALITY entertainment for me. You've given us a lot over the years without much in return so you deserve to hear you are appreciated and that I believe you firmly belong on any Legends Day roster! Thanks again!

Not half as good as TWW.

The first 3 1/2 pages were all about sexual exploits between various wealthy bisexual women who all had a soft spot for our hero. Rather long to set the scene.

Then we had the party scene and the lockout which is very similar to the one in Trials of Love.

After that we had Rebecca's growing involvement with Marcus which she hid from Michael. No convincing explanation as to why she did it.

Finally the denouement about how Rebecca's father was paying off his debts by selling off his daughter was rather far fetched.

A more than fitting follow on from The Woodworkers Wife!

I liked it but...1. it was too long, 2. it was like you tried to graft together two stories; the mystery/crime and the lesbian/sex triangle and didn't get the graft done well, 3. Either story had the ability to be quite entertaining or interesting/suspenseful but in this case the whole is less than the sum of its parts. 4* not the five that it looked like it deserved.

should have cut this in 3 pages.

Thanks, I enjoyed this. Keep on going, I wish I had a small part of your ability

one hell of a way to make a living. TK U MLJ LV NV

Ahhhh, now that was wonderful. Now back to work. Excellent break

I don't care what the trolls say - this is an excellent story and a great completion of the woodworkers story. Superb writing and thanks for your talent. I didn't read all of the comments but the ones I did read were complete bullshit - you are a great story teller and I appreciate your talents! THANKS,

Bubba!

Once I started reading it, I didn't stop.

Another fantastic story ...

I love the pace of your tales and the quality of your writing. You are a legend.

Can't wait for your next story

Thank you for a well written story. You went to the well again, brought back a bucket of entertainment, lol.

Earned the 3*s from me.

AMerryman

From lovably good to the smarmy and darkly evil. The overlap with TWW was a little repetetiv but necessary for the storyline. I'm glad Marcus finally suffered some consequences. I don't understand why her father had to be put amongst those on the dark side.

this story is a great companion to the sister story that started this one. It kept u interested all the way through as u had no idea what really was going on behind the scenes until the very end. so glad that they were able to finally put a stop to all the things going on and come out ahead of it all. keep writing

Magnificent story

Your stories keep getting better. Thanks, AndyHM, for a long and well thought out story. Very entertaining.

Outstanding! The best stories use sex as a seasoning to an outstanding narrative. Yours fits the bill to a T. Wish it had been longer. A follow On?

Well done

Dr B

Great story. Nothing more to say/ 5*

anon.1

Five stars, but I don't think we needed ALL that back story!

"She's a nice girl, Michael, just a bit too trusting, and she fell for an unscrupulous asshole who sold her a bill of goods just to get her in his bed" - Sounds like some background that he SHOULD be able to use when she runs into another seducer.

"I sat down on the bed and pulled a corner of a sheet across my waist." - LOL, a little late for that!

Give Mary's track record of manipulating lovers, why is Rebecca suspicious of HIM?

She's probably closest with Francesca because of the three women, SHE'S the only one to have also loved Michael.

"I... I, why didn't I think of that?" - Because you're already falling for the snake's charming act.

"Your charming wife is correct" - While it seems like an innocent compliment, why does it seem that these sleazes always seem to call the wife "charming"

"I guess if you didn't know his reputation, he could come over as interesting and rather charming" - Yet, she knows his rep, and she was falling for his BS.

I'm a little confused - At the beginning we're told that she doesn't know she's being seduced, yet here she seems well onto him.

Minor nit pick - It's a serious crime in Europe AND Romania? Isn't Romania part of Europe?

In all the years they've had the European office open they haven't got ONE other lawyer with the proper credentials and knowledge? How does she take a vacation? What did they do when she was on maternity leave?

I'm no expert on the law, but she presumably has all the info she needs from Marcus, why the need to see him so much?

Awfully convenient the date of the party being changed!

"Mike, please, I need a while to sort this out, I beg you, don't make this any worse than it is." - What is there to sort out? You've fucked up, go with your husband and sort things out with HIM! YOU'RE the one making things worse by not standing by him and up to your father.

She says that nothing happened, but why does everyone think that Marcus is your husband?

Her explanations about the party don't explain her being with him in OTHER social situations.

"This is very hard for me because you warned me about him and I chose to ignore you; I thought I knew better" - BINGO! As soon as she saw that he was right, and that she DIDN'T know better, she should have walked away, and told her father to fuck off!

I don't know much about the law, but I don't think you can be disbarred for dropping a case when your client has been making inappropriate advances!

"Your wife has had her eyes opened, and she's seen the real Marcus." - She already saw the real Marcus when they met the first time!

Why would she care about "curing" the bad boy? She's not going to leave Michael for him, is she?

It's nice that she's all apologetic and all, but with all the red flags, why was it so easy for her to disregard her husband's concerns?

Absolutely loved it. I often had wondered why I hadn't seen anything more after The Woodworkers Wife, a story which I also really enjoyed. The length was a bit more than expected, but what part would you cut out? I truly think it made for a great story, with very personal investment in the characters. Thank you for adding to this overwhelming list of stories to read. I find that I am having trouble getting through them all!

RNebular

Couldn't put it down. Thanks for this. Please keep writing. Five stars.

I thought it was a well written and constructed story, and even the device of compartmentalising different times and events worked well. (I often find that breaks the flow of a story, but here it seemed appropriate.)

I did have difficulty with keeping all the characters and their relationships to each other in mind as the story progressed. I read the first two pages, which read like a really sweet romance story. (I like romance best.) I then took a break, coming back a day later.

The rest of the story was compelling and I kept reading all the way through in one sitting. But I did have to refer back a couple of times to see who was related to whom as the different names came and went and came back again.

But all in all, I found the second part to be a really good detective story and the bad guys got their just desserts in the end (as they should).

Lue

Just finished reading this story. It was the last of the July 4th legends days stories I read. It may be the best of the lot but there are some other great stories, also.

Yes, it could use more editing, it has extraneous and irrelevant filler, and some of the characters' thinking and actions are totally out of character. But overall it was well crafted and a pleasure to read.

I suspect the anomaly or incongruity that many readers have voiced is that there really is no seduction unless the woman cooperates in the process. The act of being seduced by some clever powerful predator is a lame excuse from a woman who cannot admit that she either sought out or accepted romantic/sexual advances. Innocent naive women are seduced. No woman wants to admit she acted like a whore when the right man at the right time and place made advances toward her. So we have Luedon and her ilk presenting themselves as merely "wandering" women. But we all know who and what a wife is who allows another man improper access to her heart and her body. It always starts with a kiss. Rebecca acted like a high school slut, surrendering to the advances of the school's alpha Romeo. It was only a matter of time before Marcus would have been balls deep into her. The fact that Rebecca had to be saved, rather than having the intelligence and the instincts to save herself, is what leaves a bad taste in our mouths. Michael knows, it could happen again.

Great plot and story. Nice to think Marcus is getting his asshole renovated by his cell mates.

As another poster noted, there were several pages of "the lifestyles of the rich and famous and libertine", which should have been edited way down.

This contrasted with a drama/detective story that, once it kicked in, was absolutely riveting to the very end. An odd situation for a porn site, in that the sex was the least interesting part of the story.

Still 4****

So much fun to read these stories. The Accountants Wife was one of the more enjoyable. Thank you.

My favorite story for Legends Day.

After sleeping on this, I'm still troubled by how much success Marcus DID have.

True, as we saw when she was introduced, she WAS trusting and naive in her younger days.

But now, she is a mature, intelligent (if not brilliant) woman who has met him before, DIDN'T like him, and easily put him in his place. Despite this, and being FURTHER warned, she lets herself get sucked in?

SOME things she couldn't help, like her father forcing her to work with him and Michael's trips, but knowing him as she did, no matter HOW "charming" he acted, the SECOND he was in the least way inappropriate, i.e. holding hands, he should have been corrected, the next time slapped. A third time would have been a talk with her father how she WOULDN'T work with him.

I know some of this was needed for the plot, but I think the story could have been told just as well with her less a willing victim.

Even so it is one of my favorites

But... I really wished there was more direct confrontation in the take down of Marcus. With the foes fighting back tooth and nail.

The ending just seemed a.bit rushed and too tidy.

But it is what it is.

Flaws summed up by others:

“After that we had Rebecca's growing involvement with Marcus which she hid from Michael. No convincing explanation as to why she did it.”

“And as always, the moral of the story is that women aren't to be held responsible for their actions.”

“Hubands in both stories blame lovers (Marcus). They should be mad on their wives, not the other man. “

“I don't know much about the law, but I don't think you can be disbarred for dropping a case when your client has been making inappropriate advances!”

"Your wife has had her eyes opened, and she's seen the real Marcus." - She already saw the real Marcus when they met the first time!”

“Why would she care about "curing" the bad boy? She's not going to leave Michael for him, is she?”

“It's nice that she's all apologetic and all, but with all the red flags, why was it so easy for her to disregard her husband's concerns?”

My greatest problem was the lack of concern over his wife's actions. All the emphasis was on her being led astray by a master manipulator rather than letting herself be willingly manipulated. The frequent lunches, the kisses, the dancing, the lies by omission etc etc hardly got a mention in their far too speedy reconciliation.

You write well but I think your wives' betrayals should be more thoroughly examined and they should be held much more accountable for their treachery.

Having read many and understand "forensic accountant" because of my life in it.... this is my type of story....would love to find more like it...... well written, fantastic plot.... intrigue.... the best ever, thanks...... only complaint..... no sequels.....

but the research. development and discovery for the truth....WOW TK U MLJ LV NV

The story is very well put together with a good intriguing plot. From a personal view of a few things, I don't understand why the wife gets a complete pass on her actions. She comes across as being unbelievably naive. It doesn't make sense. All-in-all the story was very good.

"Marcus, can you be a darling and see if you can find me a drink? Tell you what see if you can find a bottle of champagne. I'm in the mood for some bubbles." Is this what they call a "tell?" You betcha, "darling!" Someone's lovely wifely legs will soon be spread, shortly after he slips you the Roofie and helps you to your hotel room with dear Daddy's collusion!

Hiding from Michael all the details about the party for several weeks? Meeting Marcus again and again for long lunches, kissy face, and grab-ass? Openly acting like she belongs to him at the party? Being pissed off that Michael has shown up unexpectedly? (Oh shit, I'm caught!) OK, is there anyone else besides me who smells the unmistakable scent a cheating cunt nearby? I thought so....

Only by coming to her senses and chasing the cab does Becca hold on to her marriage by her fingernails. And Mike lets her off far to easily IMO.

That said, I really enjoyed the story (in spite of the oopsies and inconsistencies that others have pointed out). And while it's quite satisfying to see Marcus finally get some comeuppance, I would have liked to read more about how Mike's forensic accounting led to his downfall (instead of hacking into email servers, etc.). As a retired forensic investigator myself, it always gave me pleasure to help put bad guys and fraudsters away....

Thanks very much for this fine contribution to LD2!

in life are often disguised and cunning. Pride goest before the fall. Combine hose two concepts and we have real life decisions that are now being made by the parts of the brain that that think common sense is a cheap perfume. It is much easier to fool a person than to convince them that they have been fooled.

The pure evil of a sperm donar turning out his daughter makes Rebecca's dear old dad the biggest LW heel of the young month. Although, the Marcus character gets his comeuppence he is underdeveloped. I want to dislike him but wind with more animosity towards Mrs. "I am wearing big girl panties and can't be seduced."

The weaving of multiple themes amongst the back drop of yachts, mansions, lesbian villas and industrial intrigue made this a page turner. Really enjoy the Mary and David characters too. In fact most of the characters stand out. Dirty Old Man Voice- "Tell me more about the au pair."

Fantastic contribution. The conclusion could have been a bit more dramatic as I really wanted to see Winter's balls on the chopping block. Thanks for the story.

@boatbumm: "Marcus, can you be a darling and see if you can find me a drink? Tell you what see if you can find a bottle of champagne. I'm in the mood for some bubbles." - Yes, I had forgotten that part. Those aren't the words of a true loving wife, those are the words of a wife who is ABOUT to cheat, if she hasn't already!

@Insignia: "I am wearing big girl panties and can't be seduced." - Another line that I don't remember commenting on, though I do think I mentioned that she KNEW he was on the make, yet still fell wa-y-y-y too easily under his spell.

First, this is by far the best story I have read here recently, thank you for writing. On the story, I liked it a lot, but was pretty pissed at the light treatment the wife was getting regarding her actions. Did I mis-read, or did she not tell her husband of the date change until she knew he could not re-schedule? Either way, she was not being honest with him. She was also, with comments others have noted below, basically making herself available to the infamous Marcus. The way the scene at the Christmas party was written, I am quite honestly stunned at her turn around shortly there after. Thanks for writing.

a finish... from the party to the end the bad guy is barely an after thought. And her party response and dialogue are a bit off the mark as well.

And also thanks to your editor for making it a seamless read. I place it up there with “The Woodworker’s Wife” and it’s a great companion story.

Unlike some others, I felt that the wife was treated realistically (i.e., not burnt at the stake) after she was honest in recognizing how close she came to being unfaithful, and you made it clear that she was truly remorseful for what she had done.

Also, it must be remembered that her father was pushing her towards Marcus, and she would have never believed her father was capable of destroying her marriage so the odds were stacked against her. Once she recognized what he’d planned with Marcus she backed her husband completely by resigning her dream job and then pursuing action against her father, knowing it would destroy him. In my book, that would constitute 100% allegiance to her husband and children.

The real evil in this story was not Marcus - he was just a snake. The real evil was Conrad - pimping out is daughter to get out of debt. One thing I have observed - hackers are the new deus ex machina. Even Lazlo Zalezac, one of my favorite authors, is doing this. DTIverson another favorite does this. Back to the story, I agree with many of the commentators that Rebecca got off lightly however knocking her up again was a smart decision since hubby wants to keep her. Five star story.

A wonderful gripping story from start to finish, you are well worth the title "Legend of Literotica".

Damn fine story. As a forensic accountant I can seriously relate. But, regardless, a truly fine read. I also congratulate Randi on the 'Legends' efforts. Thank you all!!

Thanks Andy, as another commentor wrote, this was spellbinding!

I'm a grown man so this kind of melodramatic story isn't my thing, but I suppose teenage girls might love it.

So far the best of all the Legend Day stories. 5*

Great story. I gave it 5* But would gladly give it 1* for every page (10*) Truly a legend.

The sequel impressively surpassed the original in scope. I'm still partial to "Woodworker's Wife, because it was such a sweetly reaffirming love story, and sequels rarely live up to the originals, but in this case, the story was more expansive and complex, and hence, entertained in a different way than "Woodworker". I enjoyed it thoroughly. Thank you for sharing your gift. *****

I've never run across your stories before - and will be reading them all. I could not put this down. Thank you!

I just finished this story at 5am because I couldn't put it down. I did once to go to the bathroom but hurried back to avoid loosing the of anticipation of the finish.

This is one of the most compelling stories I've ever read. I plan to again in a year just to relive the excitement it creates with the tempo of the finish,

Thank you, and blackrand and her team for creating this opportunity to enjoy so many great stories.

I have not read all the comments so these are my thoughts. The story it self was wonderful, detailed and exciting. I thought the ending was rushed however. I always hate to give a negative opinion to a free story, but that is what editors must do. Still five *. Keep on writing. Doctime.

At the end. What it lacks for me is the lack of final confrontation and commensurate

Pain for the bad guys. Don't care for the synopsis type of ending. A good head butt, knee to the solar plexus, and a kick in the nuts are deeply satisfying as I remember sending a few in my youth. I forgive you your British lack of understanding (sic)

Still a 5. Thanks for the tale.

"Let me tell you a story"

"But FIRST let me take you back a long time..."

"But before that, let me take you back an even longer time"

"Now I can start telling the story..."

You have this thing for bedroom paintings, don't you? It was all over TWW and I don't think a page passed without mentioning them.

This was a quite enjoyable story. I liked it more than TWW but a trace less than the one with the pianist.

Another of your themes: warned wives willfully and wantonly wavering with their wiley wooer...and essentially getting away with it. "Oh...I was SO STUPID! I am just a GRRL! Never mind the lines of men, women, children and small farm animals warning me from putting my hand in a blender. I know the blades won't cut ME!"

Wood Wife, Piano Wife and Lawyer wife. All of them claimed and displayed that they don't have enough brain cells combined to melt an ice cube. And because the husbands love them, they buy it. It is left to the readers to look askance.

But this is not my 'but'. We all have our favored themes.

My 'but' is 'but why isn't it longer'. 'But why isn't Conrad smarter'. 'But why aren't the men he sent to grab his grandkids not following the PARADES of people going in and out of the house.'

I wish you had cut out about 30% of your panting lesbos adoration, a few gushing accolades toward fictitious Francesca, and added about 4 more pages of actual give and take between the heroes and villains.

There was an entire armory of Chekov's Guns lying around, unshot. A David, Francesca and Wife threesome. Did the nerds nail any of the models? Why didn't Conrad shoot back at his daughter? How well did the couple reengage? Why wouldn't Marcus claim a set up and throw doubt and calumny at David and Rebecca? Is he above accusation and insinuation?

In sword fighting terms, the 'insult' has been displayed, the two fighters have plie'd, made their insults at each other...and then the hero just starts shoving his sword into his opponent just standing there, when the actual fight should have started.

This is a pet peeve of mine: villains who do nothing and just stand there as the hero hits him. I can see how others would see it differently, but the opponents didn't 'engage' until the party. Then...whap whap whap. "Take that defenseless miscreant!'

This is a minor peeve in an otherwise good and engaging story. And stating that I don't believe the wife fully is my interpretation of her actions, not a critique of the situation, the character or the author's writing chops.

Mentally competent adults are held responsible for what they do.

Children are not to be held responsible for their actions.

The mentally deficient are not to be held responsible for their actions.

So which does this writer and all the other writers that think the same (carvohi for example) consider women to be since they are not responsible for their actions?

I read all your stories, so Marcus struck again , getting off easy with Zoe. Is there such a human animal capable of attracting married women from there husbands. At least this ends his freedom. You are one fantastic writer you held my interest from beginning to end . Another late night for me. Please keep them coming if you can. You are in the top 1% of super star writers here.

This was one of the best stories I've read here in quite a while. The very best ones affect me in a similar way: as the husband is approaching the critical liaison, with all the suspense deftly manipulated by the writer, my pulse shoots up, my mouth gets dry, and my scalp tingles.. What will he find?? What Andyhm does so well is that he makes a great connection between the husband and wife, and the wife appears unassailably faithful and devoted. Then the snake in the garden works his way in soooo patiently. A lunch meeting here and there. A business dinner, with maybe a glass or two of wine. There is no rush- the wife doesn't suddenly lose her marbles like so many less patient LW stories have happen. She is the subject of a long and skillful seduction and goes to the brink. That's what is so great about a story like this. I am so glad we got this treat as part of the Legends Day II, and look forward to more from this fine author.

There are many scumbag low life's like Marcus out there that prey on married woman. Even the most loyal might eventually fall because guys like him become the friend and slowly plant little things about hubby as they listen to her every day life. They make there mover very subtlety. One big problem for a guy like me is trust and how do you believe nothing went on if she was able to lie so much about how much her relationship has gone personal. I feel that her emotional cheating and a couple of kisses might be to much for me to get passed. I know it could be childish but when a person is told and they still go and do and then continue to fall for the persuasive dick than I feel it means that deep down they might have wanted to do it. I know way to many married and single guys that love to fuck only married woman . This one dick films it all the time . He shows everyone him fucking her ass and making her talk down about her husband. He has her beg for it and it's really sad she acts that way. She made her husband s laughingstock and herself a pig. Great story with a somewhat reality base to it.

Interesting enough, but there were way too much telling and not enough showing, and the story went on a few too many tangents, becoming a bit diluted in the process.

the little twists and turns made it interesting enough for the story not to have actual infidelity to keep the reader being interested as to "what's gonna happen" all the way til the very end.

this was a ten page story that seemed short, due to its semi-griping nature, on two actual fronts: whether the wife has had an affair with the bad guy, and whether or not the author would invest enough time to flush out the financial crimes of Marcus & Co.

the almost-affair front was satisfactorily explored and brought to a satisfying conclusion; but the other front was a bit rushed. nonetheless, again, the author spent enough time on both angles to keep the reader interested all the way through a long, 10-page Literotical story...

in fact, I'd been so much more invested in our hero's line of work and the question concerning his beloved wife Rebecca's potential fall, I didn't spend too much time thinking about our hero being an-occasional-stud for all those bisexual nymphs.... e.g., did he have sex with his beautiful bisexual aunt, too? Or was it just with Francesca, the dark Indian beauty and others who came in and of of Francesco's exclusive villa?

Love is reflected in Love. You won Marcus lost and we won with a Great story from Andyhm.

Another Legend II winner!

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

x

I didn't like this as much as "The Woodworker's Wife." For one thing, the narrator seems hypocritical to me:

He approves, and even admires, when Francesca and Karen seduce a married woman; far otherwise when Marcus tries to do the same thing. Do the women get a free pass because they're women, or because it isn't his wife who they seduce?

Michael is comfortable with Mary's continuing adultery, and with her flaunting it by hanging a nude painting of herself and her lover in her bedroom. He's ready to ditch Rebecca for doing far less with Marcus.

Then there's Rebecca. Dad sets the Christmas party for a date Michael can't make, tells her it can't be changed, and orders her to be escorted by Marcus. Instead of refusing, she conceals the truth from Michael, puts on her sexy new party dress, and has a fine time with Marcus. Since Michael won't know, she doesn't see a problem. It reads like she wants Marcus to seduce her, and doesn't change her mind until Michael threatens to leave her.

Taken all in all, David and Zoe were far easier for me to root for than Rebecca and Michael. Just my 2 cents' (or less) worth.

There were some similarities to TWW a I guess can be expected given the plot and characters shared. On the down side I don't believe we truly got to the bottom of Rebecca's relationship with Marcus. The episode overheard at the party doesn't seem to be clean and clear. On the bright side Marcus has finally had to suffer consequences of his actions.

But you need a editor and learn how to spell! Also it seems that everytime Rebecca and Mike fuck she gets pregnant...at least everytime you mention them getting it on they seem to know that that was the time she got pregnant.. doesn't seem like they got together very often!! Also it is never made very clear just what went on with Marcus and Rebecca...obviously more that she admitted to!

Five stars. Always love seeing your stuff. One of my favorite authors. Here are a few thoughts: while the continuation of the Marcus story is interesting, it didn't really differ substantially from the original. This was continued solely for the purpose of seeing Marcus get his due. However, we've never really seen him at his worst. Heard that it happened to others, but in your story lines he is 0-2. He's a failure. Would have liked to see him actually get a measure of success, then get stung, and then relish the drama as hubby and wife struggle to piece things back together. Another issue is the whole "didn't really cross any lines" spiel. Heard it in both these tales and in both hubby essentially agrees. So where's the drama? I actually think they both crossed a serious line. Making out with another man is serious. Not necessarily serious enough to destroy the marriage, but I have to wonder what the point is. If you keep trying to convince readers that what happened wasn't really that bad, then why are we reading this in loving wives, and not in romance.

I was able to like TWW wife a bit better because she seemed like she might resist. Rebecca seemed like she was already sleeping with him . The work had been done just the premating ritual had to be finished.

I don't often give 5 stars, this time I did. the ending was a big hurried after probably too big of beginning.

But I still liked it!

Prose.

Some very unsatisfying plotholes were a weakness. they nagged at me . His wife did choose him but for someone so detail oriented he accepted her excuses far too easily.

She knew that 'This was going to be the night', when she bought that 'special dress' that her husband didn't know about and that she knew he'd never approve of her wearing if he wasn't with her. She KNEW that she was Markus's date, her b.s. story about the dress not mattering because she was going to the function with her dad made her an instant liar. That's one of two ridiculous contradictions in this story that make the husband and wife, two supposedly highly intelligent and highly competent professionals, look like total fucking idiots. How the author, Andyhm, could write such a blockbuster story and then fuck it up with such blatantly obvious contradictions is a poor reflection on.... you know who. She initially called Marcus a creep and smarmy and told her husband that he had nothing to worry about.... so how could he NOT throw those lines back in her face when she got caught and then gave him the bullshit about Marcus being charming, friendly and funny. ... (All the things that her husband had initially and specifically cautioned her about him, when he told her about the info that he'd gotten about Marcus fucking Linda???) Gimme a fucking break. Now the readers have to be stupid TOO???

What her husband saw and overheard was his happy and willing wife, who 'knew' that her husband was nowhere around, about to commit adultery.... PERIOD... plain and simple. She might have had the car set up, as she said, but that was a back up, for insurance purposes to have a story to tell... 'that their fucking hadn't been planned'... just in case he ever found out and the shit hit the fan.

Um, how do you know? I'm pretty sure the author is the final word, here, not your surmise. Why do people insist on reading things into stories that the author doesn't write? Did the author say she was lying? That's the final word. She wasn't lying, because the author says she wasn't.

There's no reflection here on anyone other than you. The author says it was midnight. You want to argue with him and say it was noon? The author says it was yellow, but you say it was blue. I think I'm going with the author. He created the character, and if he says something, that's the way it is. You can write your own story in your head if you want to, but don't blame it on anyone else.

But you must admit that it is entertaining the way so many commenters believe that an author's characters must do things and think things the author didn't have them doing or thinking.

The problem is that authors just don't seem to know what their characters should be doing.

Lue

I think we all imagine different scenarios with any story, but not at the expense of the authors vision which is the final word to most of us. Sure the wife may have lied in one of the scenes running through some minds and they are welcome to their alternate ending just as the author was welcome to his version which was the actual happening. Just good fun and a sign of how enjoyable this story was, that we are able to go through what if. and maybe it happened this way thoughts. Still one of the best stories I have enjoyed here, so dear author I will be content to let your vision be the fitting end lol.... 5**

What we're told is that there is no evidence she cheated but there is no evidence she didn't cheat as well. If she isn't cheating, why did everyone think Marcus was her husband? Anyway, the story is about a man giving his wife the benefit of the doubt and was ok but not great.

That's pretty good. The problem is, in that scenario, the author intends for the narrator to be unreliable. There are the "twist" stories, where the readers are deliberately mislead, which I dislike, and then there are the authors who don't have a clue.

Andyhm wrote a straight story here, and there are no tricks. He didn't write her as a cheater, ergo, she is not a cheater. Everyone is free to write their own story in their own mind, but to denigrate a story based on the story in your head, not the one the author wrote, is just illogical.

Justgr8 said it. It's the vision of the author that matters. We're all free to imagine, but the author wrote the story he wrote, not the made up in our heads version, and deserves to be judged on the merits of what he wrote, not what we imagined.

To see Marcus go he was good for the part.

I would rather the story had deleved deeper into his relationship with the MC's wife and how it worked it's way into dangerous territory.

But it was entertaining from beginning to end so that is nitpicky.

I don't know why women in your stories act dumbly. I mean you do not blame them for reprociating sexual advances stating as them being innocent or unaware. No matter how much you love someone the things she did are not acceptable.you would have to be a zombie to not know that someone is pursuing you like the way Marcus was.I don't think make up sex solve the things she was doing behind his back.

Loved your story. Disappointed that the "speculation-suspense whether she is cheating" period was so short.

Keep writing man love your stories.

It was waay too long. It was good though. Can I suggest something? You should've focused on building the destroyed trust rather than the issues with 3 men. You were too focused on them it makes the story between Mike and Rebecca fell short. It wasn't realistic enough to just forgive your wife after seeing her in the arms of the man you hate

Great story with great characters. Five out of five.

Good to see Marcus the villain back again. A great villain always makes a story better. And good to see him get what he deserves.

I like your stories in which the wife is tempted and almost falls. But I felt the reconciliation was a bit too quick for me.

I would have preferred if Mike and the kids had gone to Italy without Rebecca, and she suffered a bit more as she slowly realizes how she had been duped before the reconciliation.

She didn't cheat but she came awfully close. She lied and she deceived which breaks trust. Mike forgave her and took her back a bit too quick IMHO.

I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Steve

This is one the best stories on this site. The author needs to be commended, and he is second to none in sustaining the unnerving tension. He deserves 5 stars plus!

However, I have one difficulty. It seems to me that given Marcus has no morals whatsoever, why wouldn't he have dropped something in Becs's drink during one of those cozy lunches earlier and had his way with her? Given her character, she would have been receptive! Why would he have to wait till the evening of the party? The only way to get around this issue would have been to have Marcus feel so strongly that he had to get his prey without any help, which could make sense as he is arrogant and has total belief in his well honed seductive powers and charm! If that was so, then it would have been better for the author to develop this a little bit. Just a tweak in this direction would have been good.

Marcus is one the best villains one can come across, hateful and attractive to women, almost like a modern Dracula, and I wonder if the author lost a goldmine by effectively finishing his character off. Can he escape from his prison and reappear elsewhere? The wounded animal smarting for revenge is powerful.

Thanks for a very well-written offering. I gave it 4*.

My issue with the story is that I simply don’t like the fundamental plot premise of “the expert seducer.” My wife is perfect… apart from falling under the spell of another man… but it’s OK because… he was an evil, expert seducer! This is a plot device that essentially enables a hubby to avoid looking all trust issues – generating “romantic” reconciliations that (probably please the masses, but for me) feel shallow and false.

“The expert seducer” plot device is specifically designed to reassure hubby that ALL of the attitudes, actions, and/or issues that led to wifey’s infidelity fall exclusively at the feet of “the expert seducer” – how convenient! Although the seduce-ee (i.e., the seduced wife) typically: holds secret, romantic meetings with the seducer; lies directly or by omission; feels tremendous levels of dissatisfaction with her marriage - but only because of the magic whispers of “the expert seducer”. Surprisingly, all of this evil is poured into her head… while wifey somehow manages to behave perfectly normally within the marriage to avert any suspicion about her secretive liaisons. Did I forget to mention the infidelity… oh yeah, these stories typically involve sexual behavior that clearly does not pass the spouse test.

I should point out that in this Andyhm tale, the drama is created by having the wife walk right up to the edge of infidelity without actually having her cross over the line. This important deviation from the typical “expert seducer” plot facilitates readers rooting for a harmonious happy ending. So, this special case of “the expert seducer” is designed to help all readers see that reconciliation is the “good” outcome without having to look more closely at underlying attitudes, actions, and/or issues contributing to the drama. It’s like she was under a spell, and now that the spell is lifted… she can see he was a bad man… magic!

Let me ask you… what if the same wife falls under the spell of “expert seducers” four different times? Would you have concerns for the health of her marriage? If you were the hubby, would you have trust issues? What would drive your concerns?

For me, the expert seducer plot device avoids looking at things that matter … interesting and important things. Thus, stories that use the device lack depth, meaning, relevance. The resulting “happy ending” feels shallow and fake, like a veneer.

I loved every bit of it. Wonderful characters.

fucked Marcus or at least blew him.

Thanks for a thoroughly absorbing story, superbly written with credible characters, touching romance and gripping tension, building to potential infidelity. I greatly enjoyed this story and The Woodworker and will read the rest of you work. Having said that, for me both stories would have been a bit more dramatic/erotic if Marcus had come closer to succeeding. In both cases this master manipulator only got as far as a kiss which seems a small reward for all his skill and hard work. Would you consider writing or allowing an alternative ending in which one of the heroines succumbs to his seduction or at least comes perilously close? Again thanks for the fine work.

You said what i was going to write, but you did it better than me. I also gave it a four because the story was well written but I had the same concerns about the plot that you pointed out.

First I want to list the positives of story that vastly outnumber it's faults.

RIGHT : Very sympathetic, hardworking narrator was established, who's sensitive and loyal to family yet is prone to making inadvertent gaffe occasionally which causes savant wife , friends and even relatives to underestimate him , especially because Michael is prone to understating his strengths ( not blowing his own horn ) and sacrificing reflexively which can make even his inner circle briefly see him as doormat. Andyhm used this dynamic so well in setting up tension at key moments.

WRONG: I REALLY enjoyed hating strutting , sneering Marcus and was glad to see him get his karma in spades at conclusion. Yet the first tier authors will award even the most Gollum-esque characters a Smeagol moment and make audience feel a fleeting sympathy for human toxic mess.

RIGHT : Who isn't ready to take 5 star tour or even student hostel tour of Europe after all the gorgeous continental settings made tangible by talented author ? LOVED it .

WRONG; The outrage felt as Conrad the father in law going rogue and corrupt would have had more impact if this had been obliquely hinted at in a few setup scenes . Pile it in with red herrings if need be but don't drop it out of blue.

RIGHT ; Loved the worldliness and loyalty of Michael's allies. Great use of supporting.characters.

WRONG : Somehow a better scene with Marcus making inroads into Rebecca's virtue was merited . Master seducers are a whole lot smoother then the Xmas party lounge lizard comeoms. Valmont / Warren Beatty up Marcus's game.

RIGHT ; Loved how Rebecca was torn between career and family concerns . Her rapid rationalizations are classic for so many career women who strive " to have it all". Kudos to Andyhm for scene when Michael leaves party thinking he's lost her . Wow ! Awesome when he hears her running footsteps to join him. Awesome .

Full marks *****

BUT, taken in the context of the author's body of work it falls flat. Rather than a sequel, this is a retelling of The Woodworker's Wife. The specifics are changed, but the premise is taken wholesale from the previous story. I was also bothered by the elements borrowed from Trials of Love. I get that authors reuse story elements, but the borrowing from previous works really hurt my enjoyment of this one. It's still a 4 star story.

don't fit the models exhibited in these stories.

a) Flighty immature young girls in orbit around

b) Mature bisexual single women with power and money

c) Young women well on their way to successful careers, married to nice but timid guys, who simply have no control over their libidinous response to predatory seducers.

Woe and alas, merely place them in a room with a super seducer and she is lost. Nothing and no one can protect her from his evil intentions. She might as well surrender her knickers as soon as he compliments her and points out how far beneath her status is her unworthy husband.

Agree! What LSD said. I also see the author’s depiction of Marcus as improvable. He was more dangerous (to fidelity) in TWW*. On that point, in TWW he was presented as career-lazy, sure of his employment regardless of performance. In this follow-up, we find that he is a very adept corporate-takeover mastermind.

The titular ‘plus’ (actually a ‘minus’) is that we will not have Master Marriagewrecker Marcus around to go after our wives anymore. (Barring a prison-break!)

*A practiced seducer of a wife+mother will NOT ignore (nor forget the name of) the offspring! He will subtlely nip away at Hubby/Dad’s disagreements with Target Sweetie at every opportunity, especially child-rearing. It is MUCH more central to a Mother’s heart and mind than her appearance or career.

Easy FIVE.

5* excellent story!

is unbelievable; she cheated on him with impunity, totally; we have only her words to believe that nothing happened between her and Marcus. Her father pimped her out with her full consent under the guise of work; work doesn't entail going to escort someone the husband warned out; work doesn't concerning sharing wine or dancing or kissing and the penetration didn't happen is a mere technicality; she betrayed him, period.

Personally I find it difficult to excuse Rebecca's behavior. She was playing with fire and did not know where the gasoline was hidden by her father. The father really showed all his cards to the son-in-law He should have been worried about how many of his clients would come away from the party with the impression that the new senior partner was an adultera and a slut.

I don't for a minute believe Rebecca hasn't been in Marcus's bed she admitted at the party she behaved like his lover she has lied and deceived Mike so why believe she hadn't gone further she only said that to save her marriage and the break up of her family even running after the taxi was done for the same reason she has had ample opportunity for for adulterous behaviour it is surprising that a successful lawyer couldn't see through Marcus or maybe she did and liked his attention I wonder what Mike would do if he subsequently found out she was unfaithful. Another well written story though I agree with other comments that the ending was a bit quick after a long approach certainly a class above a lot of other stories written on here hope we get more from same author

Whether she slept with him or not. The trust was destroyed and her loss of respect was obvious. She was warned repeatedly. She thought she knew better. The deceit went on for over a month.

The last statement from Mike after the others paid their price should have been to Rebecca. While he still loved her she had destroyed the trust and her lack of respect is in repairable. We will always be our kids parents but you will never be my wife again. I wish you best in your relationships. I will not be one of them.GOODBYE

Nobody cares.

Marcus got his due in this virtual universe.

Yes, 'nobody cares'-that's why there are 100 comments.

You sure didn't miss the opportunity to make yourself look dumb!

Great story about a hopelessly naive wife and a loving husband.

I'm glad the husband managed to save the silly tart from herself, as well as ruin all the assholes that had tried to fuck with his marriage. Especially satisfying was destroying Rebecca's father... pimping out his daughter to bail himself out, what a piece of shit.

Oh and great to see Marcus get turned into his cellmates' bitch. Couldn't happen to a nicer guy!

A long and winding road, but Marcus and his friends got their just reward. Another long, detailed story that takes its time getting to the end. But it was a satisfying end. I hope Dave and Zoe from TWWW heard of Marcus' final fall.

No. You're wrong.

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