All Comments on 'The After Time Pt. 01'

I got turned off by the msub stuff at the start.... That and the whole innocence of Scott.

Spell checker, grammar mistakes, lots of issues...

Story Line seems interesting but you need an editor. The story is rife with spelling and grammatical errors. You also switch from first person to second person tense which is confusing. An editor would vastly improve this story.

I must be honest, the story sounded good, so I started reading it. I am not one to complain about a few typo's, or a missed comma here and there; but I stopped reading the story rather quickly. Incorrect word usage, punctuation errors, many errors, and typo's all made this a poor read, even though the story had potential.

Get someone to edit, or at least proof read your submissions, before you present them to us. The story line sounded interesting, so fix your story and resubmit. Good luck!

I did like the basic story but, as others have said, it needs to be edited and/or proofread. Too many basic typos (i.e. deer/dear) that if fixed will make a much better story.

It may be a good story, but without punctuation I can't read it. Please try again.

Apparently, a lot of other people like it enough to rate it high, so I will also. Please, please get a proofreader!