by JoyfulNoise
I love the domination theme and the writing was top notch. My only critisism would be that the oral wasn't hard enough but that's just a matter of taste I guess. Well done!
I really liked your first story and honestly I could easily imagine myself as the male protagonist.
Please keep writing and do not allow yourself to be discouraged. Thank you for making my day much more enjoyable.
Mike.
Well constructed and written first story. Some elements aren't my thing, but quality of the piece assures every one can enjoy it. Use of her POV was strong.