All Comments on 'The Best Always Comes Last'

There is potential in your writing. The story was creative. However, your use of interesting vocabulary was nullified by the awful grammar. I am not the grammar police but this was bad. You need an editor. Good luck

Good story premise but it was obvious that English is not the author's primary language. Anonymous is correct, you need an editor, or at least someone you trust to be a co-author in charge of grammar and usage. Hard to let the cat out of the bag and admit to someone you know that you write smutty stories, but you need to do this.

Your writing skills will be better for it.