All Comments on 'The Box'

I really liked the story and found it to be very erotic. However, I also agreed with most of the things said in the thread you started in the Story Feedback forum. Keep the story going but you need to work on the mechanics. You might be able to get some help from one of the editors or from someone who will volunteer.

Nice work! You've got the right idea. I like the way you give us a peek into her life. There's just not enough there. Maybe some more postings to continue the story? Keep it up!

Great start. Very promissing. I hope there are more toys and that they also go out to play with them... Like a restaurant maybe... Thanks.

I agree with the other posters. Your storyline is a good beginning... There are a few very erotic moments.. You need more character development. Keep at it!