All Comments on 'The Box Pt. 03'

good story!!!

Vote 1* for every story rated by THE FAT WHORE (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!

to offset the old fat ugly asshole of LIT's 1 vote

Enjoyed your story, but you use an awful lot of wrong words.

She removed her cloths - did you not mean clothes.

Also, her pussy mussels tightened. Shell-fish in her pussy? But I suppose you meant muscles.

Perhaps an editor would help but please don't feel too discouraged.

to offset the fur muncher of Lit vastiesmith/bonnietaylor

Not a bad story until now...but the problem is to know where it's going...If it'll be a story with a different approach, or just one more about the same old clichés...2*

You really need an editor and your story has just completely bogged down. Not even interesting in the slightest.

cuck fag shit.

to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote. Ask yourself why the fuck des this fool read these stories, every one of them?

Vote 1* for every story rated by THE FAT WHORE (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!

eat shit dear annony!!

Too many spelling/grammar errors for comfort and the story line is achingly slow.