by Clunkety
You're right in your comment, I absolutely agree with you. I have a new edition of The Cave on Amazon in which I've removed that part completely. I was uncomfortable that Pratt struck her, no matter how unintentional.
You are very descriptive with your writing. I really enjoyed allot of the narrative, it was uncommonly good. There was a few descriptions that threw me though, the one we're he threw the raspberries and hit her, and she compared it to a time in 4th grade when she received a time out. If that is the only reference she could compare, i was floored. It would be like comparing a match head igniting to a atomic bomb.
Please continue this story! It's not fair to leave it like this🙁
So far, I am very impressed. Very well written and I can feel the emotions. Definitely a turn on. I'm looking forward to the next chapters.
It's different from the other nonhuman stories i've read! It's got my attention. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Very well written! I was hooked immediately. Can't wait to read more!
Always had a hard time with stories like this. While well written, and it moves along at a good pace... The chained aspect always gets to me, makes my heart ache. Which is a good thing! =-) You have very good balance of something that offends me, makes me feel very sympathetic for the heroine and want to see what happens next. Whether it was your intent or not you have a very nice erotic thriller going on here. With several different possible outcomes, it will be interesting to see which you choose. I know the one that I hope for.... But I am curious at what you as the writer will ultimately decide.
Thank you for writing.
Sincerely,
Payenbrant.
This story was so addictive that I was reading it during work.
I can't wait to read next chapter.
*****
Really awesome story so far! I would like for him to decide she's the only one he wants... but that's a woman talking. Lol. Really like how he lets her look at him. Keep going please.
I found myself enjoying this. Nice details which paint a picture of the circumstances and reactions. I'll look forward to the next chapter.
I really enjoyed reading this. Hopefully the next part is already being written so we don't have to wait long.