All Comments on 'The Circus of Weres'

you may want to sit down and re read the story before posting, until you get an editor.

please do not take this as a complaint but as constructive comments

example morn means light or morning

mourn means sad ache etc

that one jumped out at me.

other than that a little short but good start

Please keep writing - I can't wait to find our what happens to Mia!If you want anyone to look over your work before you submit it I would be happy to.

very good start keep it comming

a nice start, but maybe next time have it a little longer.

good start i liked it... you mixed up going on the rv to the boat and then all of a sudden there on a plane instead of a boat?? I hope you continue to write this story sounds very good.

More please

I like it. I'd like to see you get an editor. You can through the site. There were a number of basic errors that distract the reader. That's easily corrected. Aside from that I am intrigued by the characters. I like how you mix pieces of her past into the story. I love the part where she's playing with the kids and shaking the ground under the boys. I can imagine how that must feel since kids are so accepting, for her since she is avoided by the adults in the circus. She'd have to be so lonely with just Alfred to talk to. keep writing.

Nice beginning, I'd like to read more. I agree an editor would be helpful but I'm definitely interested in this story.

this is a great start to what could be a great story. i am already drawn into the story. i would like to see more soon and maybe make the pages longer.

I like this story. It's a change to the usual werewolf story you read on here.

Please write another chapter soon.

it's a nice intriguing start. looking forward to the rest.

yes and editor would be helpful, there were some typo's, but even the best of us still have those.

my main tip would be to look at the length of your paragraph. reading online is not the same as reading a book. an online reader prefers shorter paragraphs. let's say 5/7 Lit lines, you could compare those to about 5 written lines in Words.

Good solid start.<br/>

I say this to all new authors, so I'll say it again, find yourself an editor. Failing that, after writing a chapter, leave it for a day and then read it aloud, does it sound sensible to you? does the dialog sound natural?<br/>

Keep writing, I'll be watching.