All Comments on 'The Claiming of Jennifer Kim Ch. 04'

I am very happy to see another chapter posted! I can't say that I am sitting on the edge of my seat only because we both know I am sitting up straight and doing some rocking! I can not wait to read more and see how their relationship turns out. Figures I read it tonight when I can not... ya.

Love it. Well written and not too drawn out. Very well paced I thought.I've written in this category and know it takes a strong author to take the flak! Well done.

dont usually read this kind of story but this is well written and has great pace. Keep it up

Love the Complex Characters Her trying to Deny her own Desire and Him not knowing that his True Fellings are coming forth. I think it would be nice if they had a Seperation from each Other. to see if she comes back still Submissive by her still Shaving..and can He put his feelings in place. if they do then the 2 can Work to Please each Other. She will give up all pretense of "Not" wanting to be Sobmissive. and He will Admit she is unlike all of the Other Submissives he has Known!

So, you gave into your desires with your sub. Maybe it will work out ok, but it did surprise me. The idea of separation for a period of time might be good, though maybe that is a bit soon. Excellent read.

As for ideas, how about some more public humiliation, like with the slave collar. Like the other poster said, I'm really enjoying what's going on inside these characters, and I like the way you're drawing it out.

If you do the separation, I think it still needs to be in the form of a punishment, like Jennifer doesn't know what she did or why he suddenly doesn't want to see her any more. Keep the psychological stuff coming!

Thank God he eventually screws her. I couldn't take the suspense much longer. Hopefully this impregnates her. This will be the final humiliation.

This is one hot story, written with great skill, just the right amount of action and character development.

The story is way to fucking long

i love it

Your narrative style is very well-developed and carefully paced - and I've been looking for a decent "white on Asian" domination tale for quite a while now so this really hit the spot.

The only qualms I can think of were a few understandable typos ("to" instead of "too" - "though instead of thought" - etc.) and Dave holding out so long only to succumb to his own emotions. I would've liked to have seen him maintain composure and carry out the humiliation and degradation all the way to the end but that might just be me.

Also, the race aspect was very well-executed. Some writers overdo it (having the girls only speak in broken English) and others leave it out entirely, making it superfluous, but having Dave knowingly use racism as part of the humiliation was perfect and I only regret that you didn't use it more throughout. It would've been fascinating to see Jen forced to refer to herself in racial epithets as part of her training.

truly amazing!! stories of this maturity and narration are hard to find!

This is a great story which is paced just right.

I think these stories are way too drawn out and you take too long to get to the point. This is Chapter 4 and you're still doing the same activities as in Chapter 1. Pick up the pace, already.

brilliant

Although this isn't the sexiest chapter (that'll go to chapter 5 or 6), it's definitely the best written one, really good stuff. I love this series!

Nice buildup to the climax for both him and her! Left me hot and in need of release, love Asian women!! :-)

Great story, great progression

Don't know when you wrote this, but I am enjoying it... ESPECIALLY the Gorean aspect!!! Keep the hard domineering edge, don't ruin it with a lot of fluff!

Love your story line up to now -- You should continue to degrade her in public -- Make her show herself to a waitress in restaurant - Tits and shaved pussy -- Make her ask the waitress if she is shaved and if so, could she touch it --Push her outside the confines of your apartment, but don't let anyone else touch her except for females - she will trust you more if you do not allow other men to touch her --

I am craving hot humiliation now!

Fabulous. Thank you!

But I was doing these things for her.

yeah yeah keep on fooling yrslf

everything you did till here was all you and youself only

nothing in for her here she could no doubt score better than that even after getting expelled

whatever mistake she committed she didnt deserve any of this

its one thing to desire submission woman for yourself only

but sharing her is just pimping out her for free like 13 reasons why sorta

also wtf happened i expected more cruelty brutality this was quite a lighter chapter compared to the prev 3 they were bizzaringly detailed with humiliation dancing with racial tones

thnx for letting us know that there were many many more souls tortured before poor jenny