All Comments on 'The Claiming of Jennifer Kim Ch. 05'

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I realize this is fiction (?), but there is a sense of truth to it that makes it that much hotter. Don't stop now!

I think you are hitting a home run with this story! A small number of typos but the pace cannot be beat and you can just feel her being pulled deeper into the web.

But it was worth the wait. Great chapter! I gotta meet this girl!

Hey, i posted a compliment an hour ago, and it must not have been submitted correctly.

Pacing and attention to detail in this chapter were as developed as the previous ones, well done. One of the other comments mentioned typos but I didn't notice any so there were probably only a couple. As far as the direction that the story itself is going, I've never really been a big fan of bringing other women into the mix (especially as fellow dominants) but that's probably just my own personal thing.

It is a bit sad to see our protagonist becoming too emotionally attached to his victim to the point where this seems less like a master-slave arrangement and more of a couple-that-likes-kinky-roleplay sort of relationship but perhaps that's simply the logical, inevitable flow of events. For better or worse, this is definitely becoming a more equitable situation. Nevertheless, the writing and narrative scope remains as engaging as ever (more so even) and I look forward to seeing how events will shape.

Thanks again.

This chapter is even better than the teaser you gave me.

But GODDAMN did you make it up with this one. I'd love to see her licking pussy. I bet she WOULD pee. The last one was so caught up in the details of the power exchange and the doms feelings. I just love hearing about jenniffer's humiliation. This one was super HOT! more humiliation please.

Great story, I will be interested to see where you take it. The Dom's struggle with his emotions is interesting as is the sub's. One typo, it is "ground" not "grinded".

I especially enjoyed how Monique's suggestions deepened Jennifer's submission... and orgasm. I have no problems with a master and slave falling in love. (My wife is also my First Girl, and she and my occasional Second Girls are good freinds.) It'll be interesting to see how the View Point Character, as well as Jennifer, change as the realitionship progresses. There is the stress of change on both partys' part.

I wish you well.

You know how I feel about your gift of writing. You are amazing and you know your characters better than anyone. With that in mind, there is no right or wrong in what happens next as long as it is "Yours". It is a yummy thought that many anticipate what wicked thoughts you will come up with next. I too look forward to seeing what happens next.

This is the best story I've read on here in a long time. Please post another chapter.

Thank You very much for this story. You are a very good author. Please keep on writing.

one of the best dom and sub story i've read in a while...her internal struggle makes it really interesting!! please keep writing!!

genius

thanks for a great story....flegelo

one of the few series i kept reading AFTER i actually came.

Altho this chapter was stoll hot...

It just felt wrong. The protagonist clearly knows what a D/s relationship is.

Yet he betrayed her trust multiple times.

The writer could have kept it as Master/slave, which can be achieved through fear.

But DOM/sub is achieved through trust.

& protecting a sub is vital part of that, even with all the blackmail as motivation, in the moment she could/should have forgotten that.

The ending was equally bad.

After an intense play, with a cooldown period like a car ride, you'd expect her to go into sub-drop.

Crying and needing hugs, requiring affection.

That would have made it real.

Now it seems fake.

After an ejaculate orgasm & cooldown period, there is no way she'd have this reaction.