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... grammatical and spelling mistakes as well as name swapping Red for Raven which momentarily confused me. There's some slowness in the plot where it doesn't flow well but, overall, you're off to a pretty good start. Indenture 😏 a good editor to help. I like that you're incorporating other nursery rhyme characters. I'm eager to see more appearances. I loved the Sleeping Beauty trilogy by Anne Rice so this story is right up my alley. Can't wait to see what you come up with. Just pace yourself.... you've got good bones with this one. Favorited you!

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