by DGA2000
Your writing concept is great. I was very intrigued with this story and the way the girls kept getting bolder. I do hope that this story is followed by sequels of Bobbie and Janey getting more inventive and bolder with their milking process. Keep up the great work.
The great concept and the realism of it carry it despite its (few) flaws. You come off very defensive in the author's prelude, though, and that's a turnoff.
Not the usual type of story found in this sextion. I loved the three characters and the realism. However you invited a pact with us readers when you said it was your first ever written piece. You wanted our opinion. Two others and I have given it to you. Don't you agree, with your talent, you should write another imaginative tale?