by apoplectic
I really appreciate the feedback. Chapter 3 is nearly finished so hope to post it this week.
I've got another 100,000 words (10 chapters) mapped out and the story is going to pick up a little more don't worry :)
Chapter 3 was challenging but I hope you enjoy it as much as I did writing it and if not then please let me know.
^^^Why would he want revenge he will gain power via education.^^^
Well written
Now you need to develop the general plot ie the story beyond the sex
There is also a need for additional character development