by absoluterotter
so far, I look forward to your story to continue but I hope also your not making her husband look like a complete wimp and another unbelieable stupid man , as it looks like to be all the time if a story starts like this
I love how you develop your characters and their interactions. This is one of the best stories I have ever read. Keep it coming.
This was a very well done chapter. She is fucked by a real man cock. She is filled with John's seed and she had a great cum. Wish john had made her clean his cock. This is a building thing as her training has just begun. Look forward to the next chapter
The chapters up to now where about seduction and believeable. This is about making the woman a slave thru domination.
The jump to totall submission abuse etc is without any struggle or reluctance, so there is no tension in the story, it just 'happens'. Suzanne gets wet only thinking of getting a command. Suzanne is into everything. Its all so easy and no tension. There is no building up to tension and a big release.
Sorry if I sound negative, but I want to give onest feedback.
Still I love to read the story and am very curiuos for the next part.
Thx to the author