All Comments on 'The First Step'

You really need to use quotation marks for dialogue. It decreases the enjoyment of reading your story when we must stop and stumble our reading to figure out if a sentence is dialogue or not. You have a nice idea and some good descriptions. You do need an editor or beta reader to help clean it up. Thanks for posting it.

Sorry about the lack of proper punctuation. I will try and find a way to clean it up and resubmit it. Thank you for the help.