by kuffsnkeys
Fun story! The only thing that I would say is that you need an editor to go through it. There are many grammatical and spelling mistakes that could easily be taken care of. Contact me if you are interested in help
Get a copy of the old Linda Lovelace movie called "Deep Throat" and you'll see where the idea of the clit in the throat came from.
Lol, the "Elfish Effect". Just messing with you, man. Great story, going to read the other two chapters now.
Hella good baby, Hella good! This story so totally rocked, it could set a new standard for fantasy erotica. Clit in the throat. Riot! LOL
when will you writr more? i have read this when it 1st came out, and have just came back to it some years later.
Simply Amazing. There were a few grammatical errors, but otherwise I couldn't complain. Disregard that, The grammar was excellent, only one or two spots that aren't even worth nit-picking over.
i like this story so keep going. update really soon please.
i enjoyed this story... it is great all on it's own but I can't help but wonder what happens between them as time passes .. i would love it if you wrote more about them.. it was wonderful though.. thank you for sharing this story with all of us..
Good story, plot development and steamy sex. But you need an editor - the typos were distracting. It is a different storyline and I'd like to see where you go from here.
I really enjoyed your well written story,it kept my attention well. I thought the storyline with an elf and and orc was different and I would like to learn more of Yersia's adventures with the Orcs.So more chapters if you can please!