All Comments on 'The Initiation of Kiley'

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DannyGirl31DannyGirl31about 11 years ago
amazing!

Loved it! Definitely one of my new favorites...

spankingfunforspankingfunforover 12 years ago
Women have all the fun!!

My imagination has dreamed of being immortal for as long as I can remember. Who knew huge orgasmic sex ,even if it meant being a Demon, was the way to go. Kiley was a very smart woman with a plan. Great story!!

ktmccollktmccollover 14 years ago
Well done!

I hope you have a follow-up to this story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Nice beginning!

I quite enjoyed this story!

You just need to iron out a few spelling mistakes here and there (glans vs. glands, tail vs. tale). I don't think I saw any grammatical errors.

I'd be interested to see what else is in store for Kiley, Quaroth, and Salyna's role in all this.

Congrats on a great first submission!

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