by DistilledTension
get past the fifth paragraph!!! You already had so many grammatical errors that ny stomach was so upset I had to stop and seek some relief!!!
I couldn't read your comment past the 15th word, ther was a HUGE orthographical fault that made me sick... :-)))
That sucked. Couldn't even keep the protagonist's name straight, and so much else wrong it isn't even worth the effort to type it out. It is insulting to be presented with such dreck...and I saw the ending coming a mile away.