All Comments on 'The Joy of the Hunt Ch. 04'

Yesss cant wait for next chapter

I love this story!!! Such a great chapter and can't wait for more!!

Two chapters in one day. THANK YOU. I love this story so much, and it just gets better and better with each chapter. Right, I'm off to read chapter 4.5. Laters! :)

Thank you for your kind words :)

The next chapter, chapter 5, is the one where the brothers truly get down and dirty with our girl. It should not be read in public ;)

Chapter 5 has been posted, now all we have to do is wait for the verdict. At least there is no song lyrics in there so hopefully it will go through quickly.

It is a smoother read with consistent tense. I would prefer you maintain that.

The glimpse of back story helps set the tone without detracting from the present events. Unless you plan to restore her previous life, it does not matter who she was, only who she is now.

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Let's play master and servant

Come on, master and servant

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is annoying.

But loving the story!

Good read!!!

What I've learnt so far is that, as soon as she gave in, I lost interest. Not your storys fault, just something I learnt about myself. The moment that you mentioned that she wanted to please him, I was sighing to myself and it killed the story for me.

Thanks for writing though.