by VeryDark11
Well written and a nice first effort. I liked the fact that she made him as out of control as he made her - one point of contention with this and most interracial stories: Eleven inches? Really? As a black man, I won't dissuade you from spreading the urban myths, but I can't think of anyone who is 11 inches. Lol. Aside from that, great job.
Christian
Thank you for a well-written, well formed story. Aside from the minor suggestion offered by anon, the story was completely believable. Finally, a woman who doesn't have a size 50DDD chest!
Looking forward to more!
The story is believable and well constructed. Matt is generally a likable character, not a caricature (except for the 11 inches, which could be reasonable considering his overall size). There is also enough background to allow the reader to conjure up images as his/her imagination will allow. The small town, the galleries, the fair, are all good props, especially for those who have been to such places. My only gripe is that it was not proofed thoroughly. I noted several typos. Good Job.
What a nice, well-written, and sexy story. Thanks, and hope you will choose to continue your writing.
A very realistic and believable story. It was well written, had a quiet but intriguing hook, great plot, well described characters, fantastic dialogue, detailed settings, well done sex scenes, and an interesting conclusion. Includes all the parts of a super story.
I really enjoyed the story. Hopefully you will add another chapter or two.. It would be interesting to see how Sarah and Matt will get together again in the future. Obviously, she is another white women who have found how much pleasure she can have with a black man..