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by Sissyhalo

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
The idea is there but the execution kills the flow

You need a proof reader & an editor. I spotted several confusing grammar errors that almost changed the tense & doer of actions.

I like the concept but greater detail & proofing is sorely needed.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

please keep going with this story. i do like this.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

more please!

(and I second the idea for the proof-reader...)

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