All Comments on 'The Most Valuable Gift'

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Love this trilogy! Can't wait for the next one!

What a personal odessey from such a creative mind.

I wonder how much research the author had to experience to detail the sex, emotions, and complex relationships of a polyamorus (harem?).

Wow I'm really surprised on how well written this story is. As of 12/02/2023 this is longest I have no correction that I have to on literotica website (using Microsoft edge read aloud) but yet after the story ended it didn't seem like enough time pass to the length of the story. So I say great job on this story and keep up the good works of art with your words

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Why do so many (seemingly American) Authors have problems with spouses that have passed away? A Woman whose partner (male or female) has died is called a WIDOW. A Male who partner has died is called a WIDOWER. RINSE AND REPEAT PLEASE ALL AUTHORS!!

Just finished another read of this chapter and my mind hasn't changed, you're a genius! Another 5

OOPS! sorry to pass on false information BRS, I must have gotten you confused with another wonderful writer, ... too bad you are not having to spend a fortune on books and tuition, you are really missing out, ... so much to gripe and complain over, ... I'll try and do better in the future, ... but your tales are still mighty awesome, and I have bought a few from Amazon myself, ... I think it's a good deal, ... ;-) ttfn

-- I'd venture to say that The Most Valuable Gift of All is BurntRedstone's writings, .... All are wonderful, well written and entertaining, ... and so much is available for free on sites like Literotica (where I discovered his stories, ... thank you Annabelle Hawthorne), .... how can you beat both wonderful and free? You just cannot, ...

-- Many of his writings are now available on Amazon's digital books, you can help to support our fantastic author (he is paying for kids' college) and have your very own copies of his best stories to devour, I like that, ... There are quite a few great little 'one of' tales and several amazingly complex series as well, his stories are all treasures to be enjoyed, .... ;-) ttfn

My god you are a fucking genius! I've never witnessed this level of brilliance at Literotica. Puurfect! I can't get enough of your stories. Thank you BRS. going through all your stories for the third time and enjoying every page of each of your stories. Another 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

to all the negative commenters this fiction and some extremely steamy sex throughout . all i can say is most of us men would be extremely jealous and wish it was

While I agree with NickCave from 3 months ago that the Rachel character is interesting, I find it hard to believe that she did not suffer any guilt or consequences, even in her own mind, for totally letting Ed, and Grace, down in Barbados. She promised she would take care of Ed, but what did she do ? She let him go almost totally wild drunk, and then abandoned him to a drunk woman. Rachel should be in the doghouse for a long time for what she did, or failed to do. She was not being a good friend to Ed and Grace, that's for sure.

Also, you frequently write passively:

“Soon everyone WAS enjoying the wonderful food and drink and conversation WAS light and fun.

Victoria WAS enjoying the wine and her relief at being accepted WAS so complete it made her almost giddy.”

Write more actively:

“ Everyone ENJOYED the wonderful food and drink and conversation FLOWED EASILY.

Victoria RELISHED the wine; her relief at being accepted by this close-knit group of friends MADE her almost giddy.”

Not sure if older comments mentioned this, but I struggle with nearly all the antagonists DYING. Sergo, Greg, the judge, etc.

Fun overall fantasy story, but set “in the real world”, but villains being repeatedly shot by their jilted spouses is a bit overboard for this series.

I've been enjoying the story just fine, but there is one thing that does bother me. I could see in the beginning, this would be expected, but now that they supposedly love and care for Ed you'd think the women would stop treating him like a piece of meat. The man is in severe pain and can't even walk and all Zoe & Angie are worried about is getting his big dick in their cum dumpsters. You can't give the guy a day or two to fuckin' heal? It's funny that the woman who loves him the most, the best woman of the bunch, Grace, not only treats Ed like a human being and not a walking dick, but she shouldn't be 100% fine with whatever Ed does whenever he does it. I swear, Grace has the least amount of sex with Ed among the group. Rachel has developed into a great character. Sure, you could say it's because she has Ed living with her, but it's much more than that and she's going to prove it by helping Grace and Ed raise those babies. Rachel is awesome.

Love your writing and your stories, which includes this series, of course. I have to admit though, that every now and then it felt a bit creepy. A bunch of rich cougar-ish women, desperate for huge rock-hard meat, swooning at the merest of kisses delivered by an indigent simpleminded man-child body-builder HVAC savant, whose instant and interminable ginormous erection takes them all to nirvana, whenever they desire.

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I guess it's the fact that Ed is presented, over and over, as an easily confused dewy-eyed teen who'll do whatever these rich women want, without question. They're obviously taking advantage of his nature, they all know it, but it's in a good way (wink wink nudge nudge). I don't know, just feels creepy after a while.

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Also, rich people don't share anything with anybody. Women don't share lovers, unless they don't care about them at all, and all these women are supposedly in love with him, or at least his horse-sized manhood. No way IRL, could these women be in the same room without going after each other with beer can openers and stun-guns.

I’m still in awe of your excellent writing skills. Looking forward to part three. A genuine masterpiece of story telling.

Thankyou for taking me on this journey

It was certainly alot more turbulent than the last one

Fingers crossed the next one is smooth sailing

Is Ed psychic? Also this is the best one I've read so far dude 5/5

I would like to thank you for your wonderful story looking forward to the next part.5 stars gpa

Polyamory works in a male fantasy.

The idea that a half dozen beautiful intelligent and compassionate women could overcome insecurities, jealousy and possessive territorial tendencies are questionable unless they were sequestered in a convent?

I've seen women use box cutters on an assembly line over a married male employee with a new infant.

Ed, part II, .... the further adventures of Ed Walters, ... I loved it! ... even the Luis getting what he deserved part, and his old F-150 Ford truck sadly getting ker-ploded, (those darned old Halloween Pirates), ... and Ed is going to be a father, with Grace, of triplets, and he might have another bun in Tristen's oven, ... maybe, ... I like Dale and Tristen, I hope it all works out with them, ... ;-) TTFN

This story gets better as it goes along. I wander if Grace changes her mind about marriage now that she’s pregnant.and becomes his wife. But there again so are all the others in his little harem. I wander if the others follow Grace and become pregnant, now that would be interesting. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Again an EPIC story... i love it...

Great story. I'm glad to see a complete story published. I loose interest in a story published in one or two page chapters and then find out the story isn't complete.

Another killer story. Love this.

Love the concept of Carolyn’s mandala - her dedication to enduring the pain of its creation, Ed’s pattern discerning skills leading to it’s discovery. It would be exciting to see a visual representation the image and intricate scarring.

Why make this 27 pages long? At least break it up into chapters? Author being inconsiderate or just lazy?

Fantastic story.

My thoughts are, Ed is autistic he sees patterns, his logical thinking, but doesn't understand emotion, social triggers etc.

Enjoyed the story looking forward to the next part 5 star

Yet another beautiful portion of their story.

Rip to the tanker driver

I enjoyed the first part a lot and I was liking this part a lot but then something happens that prevents me to enjoy the story and that someway ruins it for me. I can understand that one can get drunk now and then, but what I can't understand is that after the MC has problems because of heavy drinking and after telling himself to be more careful in the future, the next day he gets drunk again and what's worse, with the "help" of some supposed "friends" who know how poorly he tolerates alcohol and the problems he had had the previous day because of it.

As if this were not enough, the MC gets raped by a "friend" while he is drunk for the raper to get pregnant and the paper didn't want the raped to know he was likely to be a father. I think one should have the right to decide in that regard. Rachel's behavior also disappointed me a lot hiding the truth and excusing the rape. I think the MC deserved to know the truth. As he is a very good person he was likely to forgive everything, but he should have been given the chance to do otherwise. As I'm not that good, I wouldn't want to see that "friend" anymore. What a pity....

My rating 3*.

Re age and alcohol consumption

The age 21 requirement is NOT in all states. In some states it's 18, and I believe there's an odd exception with Texas -- if the woman is married, she can drink at 16. I don't know for sure if that's still the case, but it was true several years ago; the idea being if a woman is married, she's an adult old enough to mind her own business.

The continuity slip about Stephanie is well taken. All told, it's a minor mistake. I enjoyed the novel. 5*

This is my fourth time through, and it stands up well. On to book 3.

Two minor complaints with this storyline.

First, the story is set in the United States and drinking age in the USA is 21...the number of times Ed is being served alcohol while he is 19-20 is a pretty glaring misstep. Based on the spellings and some of the phrasing I believe the author is likely from the UK where the drinking age is lower so I'm pretty sure that's why, but still, it's a mistake that could have been avoided.

Stephanie drove Ed home from the hospital after the car accident...yet she was surprised about his cane and wanted to know what happened during the Christmas party?

Overall though, still a good read and thoroughly enjoyable.

Please BurntRedstone,

Get it right - a married man whose wife has died is a WIDOWER

a married woman whose husband has died is a WIDOW.

So many stories that are fantastic BUT YOU STILL SCREW IT UP.

Wow! Wow! I thought that the first story in trilogy, “One Who Understands” was great. After reading the second story it’s even better! Ed’s interaction with each lover and their interaction with each other is wonderful. I can’t wait to read the final story, “To Walk a Mile.”

It's a great story.

And the romance and the sex and the morals.

Yeah, a big dick is good. He brought all these women to Ed. But it's his heart and character that keeps them around him.

Great story and character development.

5/5

And on to the final story with Ed and his women!

I mentioned killerbeez and his ignorance in my comments to part one of this story. I truly hope that he is gone and gone for good.

5/5 from me.

So he now has a drinking problem and gets raped but all good moving on. Ummm NOPE

So, Ed is a Wookie?!?

I truly enjoyed this.

Shallow and predictable to an almost infuriating point. Bye.

A good continuation of the earlier story.

Well worth 5/5

Some folks chose to read on and found out how that situation was addressed later. Do you stop reading a horror novel because someone is brutally butchered? Do you spurn every Stephen King fan who read and enjoyed Big Driver or IT (yes the book contained rape - crack a cover once in a while.) Point being, it's a story...fiction...love it or hate it, score it and say your piece about the reading, not the readers. By the by, the story is fantastic like all his work...no I do not support or condone rape of any person, no matter their gender identity or preference. I urge you to read the last installment and take the full story for what it is meant to be, well-crafted entertainment. 5*

Disturbing that almost everyone here casually brushed aside the fact that Ed was raped. Idk how they could even read past that.

Only one person pointed that out. Sad.

Hated the Party Boat - I quit reading. Nobody protected him - they know he is a light weight, yet Tristin joined him in a drinking contest! How stupid is that!

I quit reading after they got back from the Party Boat and Tristin took him back to his room. Fucking around with a drunk is not sexy. I quit reading.

I'm really pissed - I was so enjoying this story

I love all your series. You have a great gift for characterisations. Though I do see a central theme of a strong silent Nerdy central male character in Jack Danner, Ben Shepherd and Ed Walters

I am currently binging all your stories. I finished the series about Jack Danner and I knew that I had to look at your other content. I will be rereading all of them again. They are too good!!!!!

Was a great continuation of a great story until the rape and subsequent lie about a child. Don't know how it turned out and don't care, brutal murdering of any sympathy for Tristan as a character and Rachel as a love interest. If these roles were reversed it would be years In prison and being demonized. Lost a loooot of respect for this story.

Currently rereading some old favorites, this is still as good as I remember. Just checked your page, glad to know you are still active. That section in your bio about integrity is concerning. An author with your skill doesn't need to game the system, the stats of this story alone prove your worth. 520k views. 660+ favorites. That, to me, is a clear sign any work of yours is at least worth giving a chance. And unlike those people defaming you, I won't hide behind an anonymous comment.

Really enjoyed the continuing story of Edward the Magnificent! The story continues to be kindly told, both about Edward and the ladies he loves so well. Looking forward to him doing beautiful Victoria in the next episode, and moving on to get himself into young Isabelle, and probably to do something for Lydia, out there in the wings somewhere. Thanx for the really great read!

I really enjoyed this story, I liked the parts about their personnel lives brought so much more to the story.

Love your stories!

"Tristan listened to her inner voice believing to her core that there was wisdom in instinct. Rachel was good people. She and Dale had met so few when they moved here from Texas. They'd left behind their social connections and had made efforts here to connect with the 'right people'. Peers from their tier of society but there was always something lacking. Some were dull as plain crackers, others had no depth, and many had a weakness of moral values."

This Tristan seems to me to be a first-class cunt, which is not our author RedStone's intent. Its the same flawed fabric of the entire trilogy.

I liked the first story. I get that fantasy allows the writer to come up with as many plot possibibilities as possible. What made Ed enduring in the first story was how his innocence was almost a gift that made other people love him. In this 2nd portion, the writer just blows the gasket. Ed goes from a loving character to one who can't keep it in his pants or his head straight and is unable to stop himself from proclaiming his love for a new woman every new day of the week.

Great effort nontheless

Totally appreciate the follow up storie you

whipped up for the fans of the first it was

very nice. The situations chain together and

Character development felt adequate and

graceful. The sex was hot but somewhat

repetitious at times but I’ll take that in lieu

of the great obligatory responsibility you felt

to connect the dots to us fans.

I loved it and Thankyou for our hero.

If only .... so many want to be this kind of man, more sexy women than you have fingers and they all love eachother.

A very entertaining story, well thought out and people well described,

Ed is the luckiest guy in the world. This is one of the most entertaining stories ever, I find it difficult to put it down. I knew that Tristan would end up pregnant from Edward but thought they would ask him to do it, I'm guessing she is pregnant from how they acted at the party. I so can't wait to start the third story.

Properly, a new paragraph means a new speaker. But who is it? I have to interrupt reading to skip to end of paragraph to find out who is talking. Would be helpful to know who is going to speak BEFORE mouth is opened. Will not escalate the story or make the author a better storyteller. It will just accommodate us readers.

Thanks,

Paul in Oklahoma

I'd like to crawl in with Ed! In addition, Dale is very, very appealing as well. Damn! Two hot men, on opposite ends of the age spectrum, in the same story. I think we need more of Dale Grant.

First it's not believable that Tristan rapes him and that Rachel is still ok with being her friend. Along with that there is no way that dale would accept that his wife wilfully cuckolds him in the literal sense of the word and he just goes "oh it was mostly my fault". The reality is she would be divorced. Also the fact that None of these women are jealous is just not believable. They are ALL OK with sharing him? Too much belief has to be suspended for these two points.

Another excellent story! Please keep writing like this.

The moult 'MILF and handyman meet, MILF and handyman fuck' from the first book got smashed ..and there were much rejoicing.

It felt lighter and shorter than the first book.

Saint Ed got more human. A relief but careful or you'll assassinate his personality. My solution would be to rewrite the saint out of him from the start.

The hammy deux ex were handled better. Improve this 10 equal increments further and nobody will be able to catch you doing it.

Jealousy is as romantic as a wife killer is sexy. A sign that it's time to seek help. I'm not quite content with how it was handled but it was without doubt in the right direction.

I'd preferred that Ed and Zoe didn't confess their love. It broke the mood and they could have shown it by being a couple in other settings. Guess you knocked Greg off to soon to show the difference between abuse and nurture. Gregs demise was melodramatically silly. So many of your characters are anger based.

Please keep Victoria as a friend. I'd rather go deeper with the current ladies than being distracted by glamour and fresh bodies. I'm so happy that Shirley was left out in the cold obscurity. That's a problem cause she was Edwards antagonist that should have confronted him with his weaknesses.

I love the story, the way you bring different situation in the characters life, but the dude is supposed to be a sex machine and end up making love to each women basically the same way. I feel like at some point the description of the love making sessions have become the boring parts of the story, like Zoe she like it rough and he seem enthralled by it, why not add more slapping, scratching, neck holding. He sleep with what six women and they all seem to love the same thing or not go into it really much. No domination, no toys, no role playing (stephanie had some potential, but it felt flat), no squirting, no edging, no massages, pretty much no sex with multiple partners, only two scenes in the two stories and both time the girls pretty much ignore the other like it's not really a group thing. He basically alway fuck in the same positions and they cum the same way. I get it maybe you only like one type of sex, but it's a bit redundant for us readers.

Also, how many time can he get rapped without caring? Or anyone else around him caring. Like when Tristan rape him, they're pretty much all casual about it. At the same time it's scenes like that that make me think you don't mind bringing new things in his sex life, so really the sex scenes should be more original. Ed also often act like he has mental disability, but then turn around and he's a genius, is he mildly autistic?

So yeah in resume, you created a world that seems open with possibilities and almost no consequences, but it lack originality in it's details and sometimes feel like a first draft that got filled with generic sex scenes.

i think this is my third time reading this but still loving it.

I can't believe many of the readers who visit this site. The stories that they value above others provides a scary insight into the mental capacity of many folks. There are so many stories on this site that far exceed the quality of this farce, but this drivel somehow exceeds them in ratings and popularity. What a shame...

the last sex scene was terrific. Great read, can't wait to read the next installment. It was well-written, has a great storyline, plot twists, romance, sex, beautiful women. What else is there!!! 5 stars - and i wish i could give it more!

This installment of the series is as good, if not better, than the first - which is saying a lot.

Another enthralling chapter.....Top Notch

So, Rachel seemed rather blase about Ed being raped and about him being kept in the dark about it.

Other than that, great story (not being snarky, it was seriously very good).

Yes, as one commenter said, the sex scenes do get a bit repetitive, but not totally, so they still work really well.

One commenter said that Ed is autistic. While he has some characteristics of high functioning Asperger's, and part of his character is probably inspired by Asperger's, he doesn't quite fit that diagnosis. While he has difficulty understanding people's dark side, he's pretty good at reading other aspects. It's these differences that make Ed so lovable, and "an innocent" is a good description.

This commenter remarked that his endowment wouldn't make women fall for him, and he's right. You've done a good job of making it clear that his endowment is just the attractant that in many cases made these women open to seeing his other positive qualities.

As reality the story would be pretty unbelievable, but as fiction it's great!

Thank you and keep up the great work.

Jesus Christ if I ever ripped someone's arms off I would very much be casually dropping that into conversations, hell even a loose fitting threat for the next person who insists on threatening someone I love or myself. Fucking gentle giants and reasons to piss them off right there. I don't know what I feel about the whole Victoria thing though, guess I gotta mill through the third chapter for the thrilling expansion!

Also, Jesus you spoil us BurntRedstone, 27 more pages of adventure.

You put Ed through almost EVERY FRIGGIN emotion a one person could experience in four life times. How many times can one guy fuck in a days time...unreal....or you have a VERY VIVID imagination...yep that's it...imagination or fantasy?

Ed is Autistic and In my experience people do not react like these 'normal' people do to someone like Ed.We have difficulty in working out people's intentions and do not understand social interaction and non verbal interaction.Nornal people do not interact well with Austitic people and as in EDs life there is a lot of conflict that Dale for example did not experience.I find it unrealistic that everyone loved him and his 'simple' ways.He is highly intelligent more than those around him but it's also just plane stupid to suggest everyone fell for him because he had a large dick.Im autistic and I've got a large dick and nothing like this ever happened to me unfortunately.I put my name down for sexual harassment in 1977 and am still waiting.

I loved these stories but it did get a bit repetitive.

This series has totally captured my interest - it's addicting I want to see more

It is obviously a male pipe dream of relations - an instant harem of eager lovers

So, while I'm telling myself it could not ever happen, a niggling little thought nags at me thinking, "what if" .

Another great story involving Ed and the people in his life. I'm sure others along with myself would love to read a third story. Please let us know if you plan on writing a third story.

I will joyfully read as many sequels to this franchise as you can muster. The imagery, imagination and the way you tie everything in is like listening to the radio before there was television, watching an episode of Seinfeld, a great action film, all rolled into the best soft porn one could find. Honestly, I have BOUGHT multiple books that I've enjoyed a lot less. Please keep up the great works!

I wish I could write as well as you. Your stories are amazing. Even the mundane scenes have me at full attention and the extreme events are so wonderful I forget that in reading erotica. Then one of your love scenes happen to spice it up and tie the story and people together in New ways everytime. If you ever published a book I'd be first in line to buy it.

Thank you.

an absolutly amazing story and very well written. could be better though if you would have toned down on the "extreme events" that keep happening. i dont feel they are all that necesarry.

i love this story so much cos i also have a massive crush on my cousin as well as another girl who is my friend i wish i could have them both

You have a great way with words. This is more than one usually reads on these sites.

Looking forward to more of your stories. You are my favorite author.

I am so very glad you have continued their story! I just hope you can spark your imagination for just one more story, I mean, you can't leave us hanging!! We just have to hear about the babies!! I absolutely love your work. You have an amazing imagination and a way of giving us characters that we just have to fall in love with. Thank you, thank you for some wonderful stories! Please keep writing!!

Best read coupled with "ONE WHO UNDERSTANDS". I want more of this.

DAMMM GOOD.one he'll of a lucky guy

Loving Ed

I have read both story's and by far the best I have read on Literotica looking forward to more of this story in the mean time i will go and read more story's from this outstanding story teller

I would really like to see more of this story it was a great read.

Red has confirmed on his bio that he IS working/planning another chapter of Ed. So we aren't left with a a good but more story opening story(this is Not a chapter, its a Novel!) Red keeps updating his bio page with info everynow and then so check it to keep up!

-SnowRevol

Ed is probably the best character I've run across on this site and there is still so much potential left for Ed and company.

i would love to see more of this story.you left a lot of stories unanswered. for ed i would like to see how for he progresses in his job. for grace i would like to see if she has twins/triplets and what they turn out to be. will grace end up marrying ed? considering her stance on marriage. will zoe get sophia to come home and prosper.

will victoria get her girls back?

Add another chapter love both stories.

First off, I loved the original story, even if it did make us wait til the last few pages to finally get Grace involved romantically (which was what the title was named after in the first place). That said it ended nicely and I enjoyed it thoroughly - on the sequel I fully expected to find lots more action with Ed and Grace now that they finally accepted each other's love, with Rachel basically being his other "wife" and the other girls being part of the harem but not having them all be in love with each other.

The round robin got predictable and to some extent boring because of how things turned out perfectly for each thing. Case in point, Ed's with Zoe and it "just" so happens that is the time he's gruff and grumpy/aggressive when he's with the person that loves it the most. Basically the round robin template didn't agree with me but that's me. We'd see the chapter talk about someone on the phone needing Ed's help and it's like "ah, guess it's her turn now" etc.

In the end I'm alright even with that, but the thing I was disappointed the most (aside from the fact there's not a 3rd chapter out yet :P ) was not enough Grace!! It felt like she was barely in the story compared to the others, her screentime got pushed aside conveniently due to classes and her pregnancy at the end almost seemed like a way to make up for it. Happy with her pregnancy and would love to see more story, just wish she had been included in the story much, much more. We had a ton of pages devoted to the Barbados trip which was nice but I kept waiting for him to return home to Grace. I love all the girls but I suppose the reason I react this way is 1) the title/synopsis of the original story being about Grace and her being the main love interest yet getting the least amount of pages. It's almost like you as the author didn't agree with the story you had originally put out and tried to push her to the side for a majority of the pages, and a lot of the pages she was in was not as detailed. Could just be me though.

Looking at this long rant it looks like I hated the story but I honestly enjoyed it, just thinking it could've been more is all. You have a very good writing style and I love your stories overall. For the original story I'd give you a 5, for this one however I'd say 3.5 at best unfortunately. There were lots of good points in the story but too many things taking away from it too, but that said I'm still hoping for a chapter 3!

Heart-felt and sexy as hell; GREAT STORIES!!

I love it , i wonder if they will all move into the same house or go on a trip all of them or mannnn i dunno so awesome.

Why are these not a book?! Please, PLEASE keep writing! I just read your stories for 8 hours straight!!!

With the Jack, the Shepherds and Ed you have your work cut out keeping us entertained: if there are no sequels soon on any or all these stories we will hunt ypu down and chain you to your word processor until you cough up more...

but it was almost too much of a good thing.

Definitely over the top.

Some of Ed's behaviour was that of one mildly on the autistic spectrum.

But there can be no disputing this was very entertaining.

Looking forward to continuation of Eds story

Realised there was a part two to the first story and read it today. Love love love these characters. My favourites are Ed and Rachel...but I still live the others also. Please write more about them. Great writing and great characters.... Want more...lol