by archibael
I'm going to be terribly unoriginal and say how original this story is. Loved it. It must have been difficult to write, especially ensuring the reader was clear at all times which person/entity was being referred to. Puts a whole new spin on having an invisible friend!
I really liked this story. It had a sly humour, mystery and erotic promise.
I liked it and I wont mooooore! Thise opens up sominy fun posabelates!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love the concept of the story, and the execution. Not only was it extremely sexy, but you also left me imagining scenarios in my head as to what, exactly, has happened to Deborah that makes her able to see the Others, and interact with them... and even what they are. masterfully done.
I'd been despairing of Literotica for some time, but this is very interesting, very literate, carefully written. Yes, of course it could be longer and more detailed, but the idea is such that it can explode in just what you wrote and leave us hungering for more.
Wow, that was something else! I wish it were a little longer, but it was an enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing.
What an out-of-the-world experience as Charlene meets Other-Charlene and the world of naked-people. Charlene discovers her twin Other-Charlene isn't afraid to sexually approach anyone - including Deborah, Charlene's boss. Fun Read! Little different take on this one! Terrific Write!
I selected this story for a review in the New Story Reviews of the Author's Hangout , Lit Forums.
Wow! It's so seldom you read something with an original take. I love the idea of an invisible twin. I hope you continue this story.
My only complaint is that the story was too short in both length and amount of sex, but neither stopped me from giving the story a five.
Great Idea!
JD