All Comments on 'The Naughty Garbage Man'

by DKmermaid

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
fun

I liked it. It seemed a bit rushed, but the story was good.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Great first story. Please write more, especially a sequel

ReiDeBastosReiDeBastosalmost 12 years ago
Nicely Done

I would never have guessed it to be your first effort had you not mentioned it.

My one (minor) gripe:It took several paragraphs before you finally let the reader know that your protagonist was a woman! It made it difficult for me to get into the story, not even knowing the sex of the narrator.

DKmermaidDKmermaidalmost 12 years agoAuthor
Thank you,

For your nice feedback and pointers : )

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Good start

A couple of spelling errors ( a peeve of mine) but otherwise enjoyable.

Keep on writing !!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Excellent first piece for Literotica.

More like this please.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
keep going

I loved it! Keep going and let us know who the characters are, make it into a romance.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Description

It's always nice to have a description of the characters(height, build, hair and eye color, etc.) Nice story, though! :)

DKmermaidDKmermaidalmost 12 years agoAuthor
Wow!!

What encouragement you guys give me, thank you : ) Inspired to continue on this story and go deeper with the characters (description of looks and so on) ...

Wishing everyone a Happy 4th of July : )

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
very nice

I really liked the tone of this piece. A bit short but quality should always take precedence over quantity. Would like to see a continuation of this tale.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
love it

i love a short story. it leaves something to image about. if this is your first story, what a way to start.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
wonderful first story

This was a sweet whort story. A little more detail would have been nice, but even so I thoroughly enjoyed it. It made me smile. If you do write more about these characters I will definetely check it out... zgirl

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