All Comments on 'The Old Clay Pot Ch. 02'
by starkie10
- 9 Comments
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoThis is so bad and so stupid and so lame it makes ch 1 look brilliant, and that was a pile of shit.
Kenisshyalmost 11 years agoYou have possibilities as a writer you just need a story to write and an editor. Your last two submissions would make a dead man want to kill himself. It's just painful to read just how little you know about writing and storytelling.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoThat's not fair to idiots, they're laughing at you too. Hell, even the mentally handicapped are wondering why you're so retarded.
The only redeeming quality is the period at the end, sadly, you added a "to be continued".
Anonymousalmost 11 years ago.. did you play truant all the time??
It certainly seems that you learnt very little in what few 'English' classes you turned up for!!
Grammar - you've never heard of it!!
Punctuation - you've never heard of it!!
Sentence construction - you've never heard of it!!
If you are determined to continue then get an editor FIRST!!
Look in the Literotica 'Index' - there's a section called "Volunteer Editors". Maybe there's one who is also a masochist!
gordo12almost 11 years agoI don't know what else I can say except stop writing until you learn some basics.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoYeah, like fuck, you fucking wimp.
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