All Comments on 'The Other Kelly Taylor Ch. 02'

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theognis over 13 years ago

*****

A tentative five stars this time. I'm thinking a good editor could assist you in telling this challenging story.

Eric_Shift over 13 years ago

Kind of confusing

Is this to be read after the last chapter, because I don't think Aron was mentioned at all. And I thought she went to Mr.Taylors place. No mention of Her mum dying. This obviously takes place sometime later. But it's not explained.

Otherwise a confronting chapter.

Anonymousabout 13 years ago

First Chapter was really good - Thanks for the warning on Chp 2

Really enjoyed Chapter 1 and was looking forward to reading entire story. Thank you for letting the reader know that Chapter 2 had racial slurs and not have us be shocked by it. While I would have liked to read the rest, racial slurs are simply an automatic turnoff. Good luck with your story.

Anonymousabout 13 years ago

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This is my favorite chapter so far, very well written... very good.