All Comments on 'The Porn Crisis'

RAAC, wow, could she sink any lower, and he be any more of shit floating in a sewer? Stories of the mentally ill aren't erotic, try writing something that makes sense.

She was hot, we got that, but the truth is, no matter how good looking a girl is, some guy, somewhere is tired of putting up with her shit.

No one is perfect, no body is perfect or at least, not for long because we all have flaws, that's what makes love grand. Beauty fades, we get wrinkles, boobs droop, getting an erection isn't as easy, we get love handles...even porn actresses suffer from insecurities, then more than most.

So next story, don't focus on how stunning, how hot, how fan fucking tastic she is because that gets old fast.

Where to begin.

The dialog was atrocious, people do not communicate like that.

The character of the wife was so unbelievably stupid that it ruined any chance the story had, unfortunately with that plot the story had zero chance anyway.

The husband...........really can't be bothered to put any more effort into analysing the story apart from the fact that the author allows anon comments and he/she deserves respect for that as so many so called "good" author's don't, so where i give lower ratings to authors with no spine this author gets 4* for the effort and balls to allow all comments.

I liked the story line but not the presentation, I read through to the end to be able to comment, not an enjoyable read but thanks for your effort.

A wonderful allegory for the corrosive effect of porn on the dim-witted.

I never comment the writing... the style sometimes (like using the second person, to tell something that the other had lived)...I'm interested in the plot and characters...This story have the selfisheness of people who only think in what they want, never thinking the way that will affect the persons around her and above all their family. But it's also about people who come back understanding the wrong they did...And about people who suffered but could find in their heart the strengh to forgive...Not all people are the same: others would never repent, others would never forgive...Maybe they would choose to be unhappy all their lives...But these two they found their way...3*

Very nicely done. Interesting story line, but yours usually are.

Keep it up. I enjoy your writing.

nope

not any more

I liked the plot but the wife seemed to be an exact copy of most of your other stories and again reconciliation just kinda...happens. Story felt like it was missing plot before she went to LA and again after he moved out.

same song different verse.

The translation to English doesn't bother me but the same theme, same characters, same, same, same, same

there are people who read so much fetish porn and/or not personally experienced the joys of blissful love and adoration that they view the world through those obscured glasses. This story depicts them clearly and succinctly. The readers are the clichés depicted in the writings.

I could list the stereotypes, but that would infuriate one side of the crowd, and disappoint the other.

this is one of the best comedy i have ever read on this site and if was not meant to be a comedy oh well .

He should have dumped her the minute she came back home. She could have just moved on with Ramon. He could have moved on with someone to trust and love him. I would have packed her shit and put it on the porch.

i agree this was a very good comedy. Wife actually sends her husband a video of her being fucked and he still stays for a little bit. I cant be upset at the ending bc i know you have a penchant for raac, but maybe next time make it a little more believeable.

Had to give it a five for the entertainment value. I'm still grinning as I write this.

I think, on the effect of porn on a relationship when it becomes an obsession. The roles were reversed from what is commonly seen, but gets its point across none the less.

I have to agree with Britease's comment: Entertaining, quite a comedy and well-done. For that alone: 5*.

But what I didn't like was the easy reconcilliation with such a cruel and uncaring partner as the wife is. It was nearly a carbon-copy of your own story about the wife becoming a groupie. No wife harbouring thoughts like Ellen (as her own words prove) and acting such selfish and cruel can change totally to get worth to be taken back - even if she is "hot", or better: ESPECIALLY if she is "hot".

(BTW: all that applies to the female character in the aforementioned groupie-story as well.)

A few words to the (mostly anonymous) critics of this author's command of the English language. I am sure that these commenters are far from able to write a story like this - not in English and surely not in German. I read far worse written by supposedly native speakers - worse especially in terms of grammar, spelling, dialogues and textflow.

Please keep on sharing, stev.

I had to stop reading this in the middle of page 2.

Steve2244 , what are you doing?? You can not write a story and change the personality of a character, an adult on a whim! The wife Ellen started normal for 3 or 4 paragraphs . Then you did a lobotomy on her. She became a female member of the 3 stooges . A moronic person, without malicious intent, who destroyed her marriage.

Then towards the end of page 2 ,she becomes normal again. You even realize you went to far with the manipulation of Ellen and the reader. You put words in her mouth of exculpation .

Stev come on, this kind of lazy writing just ruins a story.

I am not rating this , on plot, nor anything else . It's like you borrowed an Ellen from a SS06 story, then gave her back. Unbelievable fail!!

Sorry for the vent,thanks for your time lol.

AMerryman

she texts Ramon. "He bought it. Our best acting job! Text me your new address here

in town."

Didn't see this as funny or an RAAC story. I saw it as a gender reversal, in fact, the wife's character noted it as such. We guys fantasize about porn actresses - this author took that fantasy and progressed it - interesting premise - to ultimate conclusion or should I say consumation. What if I got invited to go to LA and make a sex flick with my favorite actress? if that happened, my wife would dump me in a New York minute. One would think that the likelihood of a woman behaving like this would be small, but these ladies in the sex industry come from somewhere. They are people's sisters, lovers, daughters. I remember Marilyn Chambers telling Larry King on cnn that "sex is a commodity, and I sell it." For me, this was a thought-provoking story. However, perhaps I misinterperted the author's intentions and it was really meant to be humorous.

The characters were, well, I can't even call them caricatures. They weren’t that deep. He’s whining, all “Boo Hoo Hoo, I’m a loser, I’m worthless.” She’s the cliché of too many of these stories of the woman, where she’s the one with the“It’s just sex” argument, which is pretty much the exact opposite of what women are really like. Yeah, it’s fiction, but fiction is NOT carte blanch to do anything without logic or reason.

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Then there’s the reconciliation, which may be more ludicrous than the set up. Really, she’s so great the porn star is willing to go after her? And the thing is, as you wrote it there really wasn’t any connection. Ramon comes to visit, he thinks he’s lost her forever, he’s standing in the supermarket, she’s there, and BOOM, he forgives her. Really? It would be laughable if it wasn’t so fucking stupid and lame.

I have defended stev2244 against critics on previous contributions. The formula worked for me. The woman behaves horribly, sees the error of her ways, and returns to her long-suffering lover. But this one went too far. The long drawn-out descriptions of her porn behavior were simply disgusting. So disgusting and prolonged, that the usual "Oh what have I done" conversion simply didn't work this time. She was so awful that her turn-about was simply unbelievable. Sorry stev2244. I like your stuff, but you simply pushed it too far.

Reader: "This story is terrible."

Author: "Yes. Sadly. I think we can call that my brain-dead period."

Okay, so this was intentional . My so heartfelt apology.

I mean this comedy is right up there with the stuff written by the bard! You sure fooled me. Until I read the comments .

Did you ever think about self- published books?? Thanks again.

AMerryman

In spite of the comments here, your characters are actually very well drawn. Part of the problem is that you display a lot of insight in their emotional responses to plot points, but then those emotions don't always jive with their actions, and they also change on a dime without development or impetus.

The concept, I find really interesting. Porn addiction and its potential consequences among women is an under-discussed phenomenon. I have a friend who nearly divorced over just that problem, and it's true that one of the biggest hurtles was that there are opportunities for female porn addicts that are not as available to men. So while women are less likely to get addicted, when they do the consequences can be markedly worse.

I'd be very interested in a story that explored that with more authentic human behaviors, though it is more likely to be used for tales like this or dull BtB schlock.

on an old storyline. Well done.

Basically this is about people and their reaction to porn especially to those who have never paid much attention. It removes love as an active ingredient and gives impressive scenes which leave us often threatened and later bored. Also the creation of Ramon was a great idea. The fact that he tried to live with the problem for a while may have turned many people against the story but I have always wondered how far the promise to hold her in sickness or health goes. For me personally it is absolute and what she had was a kind of sickness.

The premise was either tired or absurd. The dialog was . . .. who knows?

But I liked it anyway. It somehow managed to be lots of fun.

....so you have far less to overcome than several other contributors.

The plot and storyline were somewhat common, tending to hackneyed.

I felt the reconciliation was not supported by any real change.....just loneliness. His reaction to her going to L.A. And making a part of a porn movie...well, he should have simply been gone when she got back. Any woman or man that would do that to their spouse is undeserving of any hope or expectation of ever talking with them again.

She was singleminded and purposeful. He moped too much, then stopped the divorce and reconciled. I also thought the Ramon character was too plastic to represent anything or anyone living or dead.

What I liked best and enjoyed most, was your characterization. In spite of their circular thinking and repeated arguments, they were both likeable (in their unique ways).

Spend more time and effort in editing you stories to get your number, tense and person right. The little niggling errors that frequent your writing can, in time, become a big irritation.

But now she returns as a changed woman, and he has not yet found a replacement. So why not give it a chance?. What has he got to lose? Divorce is a great way to restart your life, but its a self-defeating way to punish someone. If he still really wants her he should first definitely divorce her, then reestablish the relationship with this supposedly changed woman. The old marriage she killed. They should see if a new marriage is possible. In the new marriage there should be a prenup regarding property and especially eventual children. But if they still love and want each other I say they should go for it. Why not?

A good thought provoking story.

I always enjoy the part in these stories when the wronged husband, has to explain to the wife how furious he is, how hurt he is, and what a slut she is. All this guy does is whine about how he doesn't measure, and up now my dick won't work anymore boohoo. I like reconciliation stories, but I wonder why she wants this crybaby back. And Him, she went to LA fucked another guy, and sent him the video for

Christ sake ?

Over and out.

Well, I have to admit that the feedback is not really motivating me to continue. Thanks to Gatorhermit who has taken the time to understand what the story is about.

The idea of a reversal of the usual female approach to porn was evident as the story unfolded. I liked the character portrayals. A tale with a moral, well written. Please keep writing and ignore the anonymous arseholes.

So what if the feedback hasn't been what you wanted? This is a tough audience and, in this category, the interest is mostly on BTB. Your story isn't BTB so what else can be expected from the comments?

I like your writing style. The way you included the name headings made it easy to keep up with what was happening, the flow was good and the interaction between the characters was realistic.

Don't quit! Who knows, maybe you have a BTB story in you that will draw rave reviews!

I like what you have posted thus far.I lean towards BTB but have found your posts fun to read.

or at least DON'T POST HERE!!!

Brain-dead characters DO NOT make for a good story! 1/5

I enjoyed reading it. Different people have different ideas and different motivations. So maybe 99% of the population would not act like the people described but a small percentage may do and who knows what happens then. Thanks for showing a alternative side of life.

No, we get what the story was "about". The problem is that no the story just doesn't work. We get it, you like reconciliation stories. However, you NEVER provide a valid reason for the reconciliation. This story is a good example.

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As another person stated, you basically have him become so lonely he gives in. That’s the pattern of your stories. No matter how shitty the wife treats the husband, in the end he capitulates and she basically gets away with it. That’s not a reconciliation story, it’s a rather standard LW cuckold, wimpy husband story.

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You want to write reconciliation stories? Fine, but provide some evidence you actually put some effort into it, rather than the “she fucks around on him, he takes her back, the end” stories you’ve been posting.

Okay, I am not the anonymous you writers dread, using posts to work out my own sense of inferiority. You've got a good sense of story. There are some weaknesses in pacing and development, but the overall story line and character development seem not only feasible but convincing. I appreciate that Mike doesn't have a younger knock out in the wings; instead you make his insecurity and despair quite real. That said, you need to develop Ramon some more to round out his character. I think the only false note is Ramon's bad English. Just because he's Hispanic doesn't mean his English is bad; he could easily have been raised in Sonoma and speak English as a first language.

What a great story. At first I wasn't sure about her interest in porn, when she went to LA I was less sure, I've been there. I think husband was correctly characterized, a good guy. Really interesting. I'm now going to read your other stories. xoxox Annette

if you want to write the story so they get back together, then at least make it believable. make it original. dont just go "oh i hate you cheater", then a just a little late he is giving her a second chance. try to give a believable reason that he could give her a second chance. also please stop writing the husband and wife as retarded. nobody who is as successful as they are are this stupid. it makes it all seem so fake.

I enjoyed the inventive and well-executed way you gender-flipped the porn trope. It provided a much more believable setup for Ellen's betrayal than your other heroines have received. I think some commenters found it a little too believable: this being, after all, a porn site. And congratulations on your increasing facility with English.

That said, the reconciliation doesn't work for me. The commenter's ending in which she texts Ramon "He bought it. Our best acting job!" is much more in character.

Part of the problem is that we're set up not to believe Ellen. She lies to Mike before she leaves ("she's not kidding anyone here and she knows it"). She lies to herself and to him about whether she's really going to LA to fuck Ramon in a porn movie. Then when it happens, she acts surprised at what we all knew was coming. So why should we believe she's telling the truth after she comes back, especially when she tells him "You know that I've never lied to you" and we know she has, repeatedly?

Another problem is that in a single paragraph, Ellen goes from "Why does he take this so serious[ly]" to "I've been a bitch" for no perceivable reason. It's so implausible that we doubt her for the rest of the story. Afterward, you do show her gradually coming to a realization of what she's done (going from excuses like "I did it partly for you" to "I was just selfish, mindless, cruel, uncaring") but by this time we're already so suspicious of her that it doesn't work.

Ellen's dialogue doesn't help, either. When Mike shows his feelings, she responds with "Sorry..." and an excuse ("I hoped you'd enjoy it"). It sounds too flippant for a serious apology. Besides, why would she think he would enjoy her porn scene, when he said for months he didn't like porn?

I think you mean for your heroines to grow up through their 'adventure,' and mature into stable marriage partners. The problem is that they start out capable of cruelly betraying someone they say they love. By the end of the story, we have no reason to believe that capacity isn't still there. Thus even if we believe that Ellen will never make another porno, we think she'll pull some new, equally devastating stunt on poor Mike.

I'm not that invested in your result, but like how you got there, and the exploration of feelings and impacts on emotions of acts of others and related consequences. Looking forward to more offerings from you, wherever they lead.

She should have been thrown to the curb just as any cheater and she could sit right next to my ex which I put her there for much less. This rekindle as it was is bullshit that would never work that way in the real world. She needed much more consequence for her actions. Fucking even only once would have been one time too many. Seems like this is a theme in your stories. Sorry it just doesn't work that way

and for upsetting dear annony. Eat it annony, you asshole

Excellent! 5*. The sex role twist was great. And to write for the Taliban BTB Nazis who contaminate this category with their knee-jerk hatred takes balls! Keep writing and working on your craft!

What sexist garbage. Basically, you're telling the reader that life as a woman consists of three options - an underpaid dead-end job in the service industry, abandoning everything for prostitution and sex work or ending up barefoot and pregnant in some man's kitchen (just so long as he "makes good money") - and that's all your female lead character will ever aspire to. She is portrayed as indecisive, insecure and unable to decide what she wants. You're also very sex-negative. Your message seems to be that if you ever watch porn - let alone allow your spouse to do so - she will immediately leave you, basically ending your marriage in some catastrophic manner to move to LA to screw some porn star on-screen.

As much as you seem to want to post to Literotica (of all places) to decry the evils of pornography and sin, the rest of your story doesn't even make sense.

The porn appearance isn't an exit strategy from the call centre job if it's supposed to be a one-shot role that's over in at most a few weeks; all that resigning the day job, making one appearance on screen and then leaving LA would accomplish is to leave the character unemployed at the end of this.

The "communication" between the spouses also makes no sense. The whole point of her repeatedly telling him what she's going to do at each step should be to assess whether his comfort level is adequate to deal with this or whether he's jealous or possessive enough that damage control (whether it be setting clear limits, or abandoning the idea, or accepting that this will end the marriage) is done before leaving for LA. The "do what you want. i'm not sure if i'll be here when you return anyway. you have already cheated. not in the spur of the moment, but in a planned way. i don't think we still have a marriage left." message contains nothing that isn't already in all of the previous "communication" with this jealous man. If she ignored the issue before, why does it suddenly become 'priority' after it's all over? This is just more of the same, after all.

There are plenty of ways to write this so that she knocks the "have hot sex with cute porn star on-screen" fantasy off her bucket list, then decides it didn't meet her expectations and run home - even if the sex itself was pleasurable, as soon as it's over it's clear that Ramon is a sex worker, he doesn't want to fall in love with her and has immediately moved on to the next scene and the next scarlet, completely forgetting about her while she cries her eyes out. Maybe she gets cold feet about the reactions of friends and family back home once the video is published, maybe the porn directors try to crudely pressure her into various specific degrading sexual acts which are beyond her own comfort level. All kinds of opportunity to have the nascent porn starlet walk off stage in tears and never return (face it, these guys have a lot to learn about women) but this story misses all those possibilities and merely has her run back based on some piece of information that was something she already knew would happen - the marriage breakdown - and which isn't news to basically anyone.

I presume you're just trying to reverse the trope where a married man in a sexually unfulfilling relationship buys an hour with a lady of the night, has wild sex with her in every imaginable position, then at the 1:00:01 mark (when the session is over) insists that he wants to leave wifey to marry the female escort -- who is understandably dismayed and horrified because she never loved him, will never love him and is merely doing her job, professionally, with no expectation or desire to take this further and certainly with no intent to end her client's marriage. (Hopefully she talks him out of hit before he does something really stupid and loses both women.) Nonetheless, the story line just doesn't quite work.

The separation is contrived and implausible. If you want to end the relatiionship, end it. Don't waste time sulking which could be spent finding a new mate whom you could espouse once the divorce is final. The relationship is done. Gone. Deal with it. That's what adults do.

Ramon hiring a private investigator is creepy and stalkerish. Why would he do this? He's a sex worker, she's someone he's been with once as a single appearance as part of his job. As a professional, he knows that means nothing. Furthermore, the people in LA already have her contact info and know she is not coming back. To show up and grovel is merely pointless humiliation. He can find another mate, why waste time pursuing someone who is not interested and who is likely blaming him for an awkward marriage breakdown in which he only played a one-scene bit part?

She turns him down, so he asks her ex to intervene? That makes no sense at all. Her ex can't do anything, even if he wanted to, as he's already separated and awaiting divorce. If there is a grieving process before beginning the next relationship (like that of a widow or widower) all that can be done is wait that process out. At that point, she needs to forget about both of these guys and find someone who isn't a sex worker and who also doesn't intend to leave her barefoot and pregnant in a kitchen somewhere, spending the rest of her life agonising over whether she's attractive enough to keep her mate. Mike needs to get on with his life. Ramon needs to get on with his life. Ellen needs to get on with her life.

They all need to walk away from this trainwreck and think a few things through.

Reconciling in some contrived and ridiculous manner just for the sake of doing so only prolongs the misery. End it, please.

stupid female character and a pussy whipped male. TK

Anon 11/21/15. He makes good points up until he's talking about Ramon and the final reconciliation. Although stated condescendingly, the points would make the story better and more relatable.

I'm OK with how you handled Ramon, there are actually sad people like that out there. Ellen's epiphany comes out of nowhere, there's no stimulus to change her opinion. She apparently had some of the best sex of her life, and is so enamored and proud of the whole production she sends it to her husband. The same husband who's opinion she's discounted, and gives the only negative reaction. There needs to be an outside stimulus for her to 'get' that shooting porn might have been a bad idea.

I like your stories, but it frustrates me that they could be a lot better if executed properly.

Hoping to see more,

Threeson

No emotion in this. The dialogue is mechanical and flat. No matter if they are sad happy or horny, it is all delivered in the same monotonous tone and repeated diatribe. Maybe you're better in your native tongue. At least I hope so.

Not enough reality. Take that as a reality check. Most of your audience is in their 50s and 60s. Most of your audience on Loving Wives has had at least one failed marriage due to the actions of their spouse. Very few indiividuals of this majority audience is what most others would call part of a BTB crowd.

So why are you targeting your writing for the weak willed and/or cuckold fantasy loving set of folks while saying it is retaliation for the BTB crowd? You cannot disguise the fact your males are weak and very indecisive. Typical Cuck lovers fare and writing.

It just does not add up. I have yet to read one of your stories and had one single reply, that indicated anyone from the BTB mindset even cared.

Enjoy your jokes it's your pen after all. You seem more interest in that area than in writing popular wide appeal fiction.

I for one will not be reading any new material from Stev2244.

BTW: I personally do not believe in BTB. I do however believe in getting shut of negative spouses and people.

Good luck in your future endeavours.

AM

FRG 1981-1985

@LostOneThere BTB is fantasy as the 90% of the stories in the storycollections.

Naturally there are some good idea in the BTB stories (as the secret deposits or to show the evidence of the cheating to above 16 years old kids, parents in laws, near friends, relatives and near collegues, but not bigger circulars (because that is felony), to find better second/third wives, to destroy the job or marriages of the lovers, etc...).

I do not understand why it is so annoying the cuck supporters the BTB stories if the BTB stories are fanasy stories. Is the BTB fantasy is a threatening possibility for cheaters, loverboys, bulls?

and then love dumped common sense. TK U MLJ LV NV

Seriously, get help.

1 star.

Uncompelling dialogue, and yet anothe famale caricature.

Your story concepts are genuinely good, to the point that I'm trying to read all your stories on one go, but I'm starting to lose hope. Your female characters almost all seem to be simplistic caricatures, and it's not as the male characters are that much better.

Particularly troubling is how your female characters always start off as oblivious narcisists and then do a complete 180 and become uterly devouted (but manipulative) doormats; and your male characters seem to be ruled by their cocks.

Your strong points are your story outlines. You have some marvelous story ideas. But your characters continue to be... excuse the pun...lacking in character. Ellen was not only a complete airhead, but she was also stubborn, self-centered, unfeeling, and arrogant. Not once did she see the pain and humiliation she heaped upon her husband. And like so many wives, she thought she could shit on her husband and her marriage and cuckold her husband on an epic level...worldwide...and he would welcome her back with open arms. Only an effeminate wimp would do that. Ninety-five percent of all men would have gladly turned her over to Ramon or else put a gun to her head and pulled the trigger. That happens more often than rediculous recon iliation. One star.

Yet another empty story where the husband takes the cheating wife back, but at least the porn angle is a bit unusual makes it feel less cliched.

The husband should have thought about how it would be to have the video of his wife in a porn movie hanging over their head for the rest of their live, if I were him I would at least have demanded she found some way to have that scene removed from circulation where possibly before taking her back.

but this was really badly written.

Not exactly what I was looking for, but yeah.it made a good read. Story's well thought. Allover. It's good.

I enjoyed reading it. Yes it had some stuff that could have been better, but it was entertaining. Personally I am a bit tired of the husband ranting and raging at the wife. I often agree with the characters reconnecting. Personally, If I were him (god forbid), and loved her, I'd encourage her to stay there and be a big star. Let her make some bucks, and 'fulfill herself'. Might as well help her be self sufficient, and stay in California. Try to move on.

Any way. Keep it up

Chilley

No way!! Divorce her stupid, cheatin, bitch of an ass and let her porn lover Ramon have her.

I am pretty sure after reading most of what you've written that you're a closet cuck. You want your wife to actually cheat on you. And the only way you can express those fantasies is by writing crap like this. I bet if you told your wife about your fantasies she'd drop you like yesterday's newspaper. And you try to compensate by writing all the impossible reconciliations. Go see a shrink. Will help you deal with your problem more than writing these stories.

Hey man I am reading the comments and I just want to say I don't think you're a cuck or anything. I enjoyed the story and the emotional roller coaster it took me on. The writing was great and I am happy to have read this work. Thanks for putting your time and effort into this and I'll look forward to reading more of your work! :)

every story you write is more of the same old plot.

I´ve liked your stories of reconciliation. This one left me kind of on the sidelines. She regrets what she did. But she should have thought how something like this would affect her marriage before she did it. Forgive her? If my late wife had ran into somebody and had sex with him. I could have forgiven her for her lapse of judgement. But this lady quit her job and drove all the way to LA. With the intent of having sex with Ramon That is no accident. Then she doesn´t realize she did something wrong until her husband is fixing to leave her? cause she was already excited to star in another movie. I just couldn´t forgive somebody the would do something like that to me. This wasn´t a spur of the moment thing. This was premeditated without regard as to what it would do to her husband. She had her fun now she wants forgiveness. If my late wife had told me she would make it up to me the first thing I would have asked was can you unfuck yourself? Or can you reverse the time to before you did it? Cause thats the only way you can make it up.

And this RAAC is very disturbing, and I’ll be specific (and hopefully constructive) in my critique.

She completely ignores his feelings and the rules of their relationship to leave for three weeks to “publicly cheat” on him with Ramon, and he only expresses 'concerns' for their relationship. He only seriously contemplates divorce when he realizes he’s not confident enough to satisfy her – and even then, he contemplates ending their relationship reluctantly ("Ellen, I'm totally destroyed and sad about it. But I think I will have to divorce you.").

Why aren’t there any trust issues? It sure doesn’t seem as if they had an open marriage – although one could hardly tell by her entitled attitude. Further, the incredible delay in her realizing the hurt she has caused is bordering on the sociopathic. They never really even attempt to identify and work on trust issues… they only try to rebuild his confidence to the point where he can redeem himself as capable of sexually fulfilling her.

This seems to be a dangerously subservient male character that doesn’t appear to have any sense of self-worth and lives only to please his wife. ("I love you, Ellen. But I'm not man enough to keep you. You will always think of Ramon when we have sex. I will always think of him too. We both don't want it, but we have already lost each other. Our marriage won't work without sex. You need to find someone with a huge cock and then try to keep his confidence intact.")

I feel so sad for this man who seems to be lacking any sense of identity other than as a vehicle to serve his mistress: (“It's the saddest thing I've ever done. But I actually file for divorce, rent an apartment and move my stuff there. She can keep our rented house and I agree to support her financially.”)

This reconciliation feels like a tragedy, and extension of an unhealthy purgatory for our protagonist hubby.

I said all your stories are masterpieces but this I did not like.Sorry.

She's married, decides to do porn, and the husband decides to keep her? Another fucked up line of bullshit.

Sorry stev2244 but you need to either rethink your ideas of all these brain dead assholes who keep taking these women back no matter who they fuck or just stop writing all together. These story lines just suck.

He just doesn't realize it. Just divorce the wanna be porn star...and get on with your life. Move away as-far-as possible if you have to....

You don’t have to burn the bitch to be a real man. I am thinking this writer is female. All male characters from this writer tend to be wimpy and forgive just about anything that the female character does. There are limits to what anyone can forgive. This writer doesn’t share that opinion.

another blithering idiot woman married to a pussy man. You have a type.

Shouldn’t have told her they were still married she might try harder then.

Maybe he should have suggested she have one last go bye fuck with Ramon.

If she accepted he’d know if she would cheat again in the future if she declined he would know she was his only.

.... "TERRIBLE"! To be fair stev2244, the Hermit was a awesome story which was a joy to read! Can't understand how this cheating WHORE wife Apologist / RAAC TURD of a story could be posted by the same writer. The only possible conclusion is some wimp, CuckyBoy ASSHOLE hijacked your moniker and submitted this piece of shit and hoped you would not notice! Good luck on your future endeavors and hope you catch this limp dick, bedroom closet dwelling loser before he/she ruins your reputation any further.

Can't believe u wrote this crap

That is until someone sees her "MOVIE" and outs her in public...just thinkin out loud...

dumb.

I've enjoyed the rest of your work but this was awful.

The second she even mentioned wanting to star in porn, any normal man would have had the divorce papers drawn up. If he'd actually done that, maybe she wouldn't have left to fuck the huge-cocked porn star and he could have saved himself months of pain.

Now there's permanent video evidence that he's a cuckold freely available on the internet. Sorry, you can't come back from that.

That sums up to story. Sorry I can't be more constructive but she make porn movie and he take her back, unbelievable.

This is horrible RAAC crap. Pass.

really too stupid to reproduce.

Stev yet again demonstrates that RAAC has a line...and this is what happens when you cross it and enter into an inexplicably imbecilic universe filled with cucks and whores

I understand you like RAAC but this was so far over-the-top I can't believe it. What does a woman have to do, in your mind, to deserve a divorce? I mean she's a complete slut and a porn star. And he doesn't divorce her? Is he just brain dead? You need to re-think your standards. This was simply horrible.

This writer does not have an idea what he wants to do. If this is supposed to be humor, it is not. If it is feel good RAAC story then it is so full of ridiculous nonsense.

Up until "Ramon" show up at the door it was going for like 2 stars but then it turned into asinine and completely idiotic drivel.

Stev2244, keep your day job, you are a complete waste as a "writer."

When Ramon showed up I’d told him to wait at the door, then I would of gone and gotten a couple if suitcases, packed has much if Ellen’s clothes as possible and pushed her and her suitcases into Ramon’s arm, shut and locked the door wishing them a good life.

Here is the timeline of events in almost all stev2244 stories I have read so far.

- Wife announces she is going to do something unforgivably awful that destroys her marriage and causes her husband incredible pain. Husband clearly states this will end marriage, wife's delusional logic makes her believe he'll be there waiting when she's done fucking.

- Wife does something unforgivably awful that destroys marriage

- Husband leaves his own house for some reason

- Husband takes ten times his share of the responsibility in his internal monologue, using logic that simply doesn't exist in a rational mind.

- Husband becomes impotent from emotional trauma and doesn't even care

- Wives return to husbands for various reasons. Most of the time, they've simply finished the awful thing they did and headed home afterwards.

- Wife tells husband the awful thing was a mistake. Every speech can be summarised as "Hey remember when I cut out your heart and shit in the gaping wound? I've since realised it was selfish. Sorry about that. Want a sex slave though? My cunt isn't just for fucking other men you begged me not to, it also heals broken hearts!"

- A mixing bowl worth of pure horseshit explanations are spooned into husband's mouth, which he chews and swallows with a grin because he's remembered that his wife had a vagina and that it feels nice to put a penis in one of those.

- Wife sets out to prove it. Because she has somehow developed a selfless dedication to their spouse that rivals the creepiest of stalkers.

- Husband succumbs, then instantly mistakes the great feeling of putting his penis in a woman with LOVING a woman, then takes wife back immediately.

- This action 100% validates wives logic and decision to do it in the first place. All these wives have the delusional belief that husbands will love them enough to take her back. All of them are right when it's a stev2244 story.

EVERY MC IN THESE STORIES TAKES THE WIFE BACK BECAUSE SHE FUCKS HIM AND PROMISES TO FUCK HIM MORE! And in this story a PORN STAR fell in love with a woman from one fuck. It is beyond embarrassing and immature how quickly these crises are over once the husband slides his dick back into the wife. The cleansing vagina of the woman who betrayed you will sooth her betrayal away. Ugh.

The men in these stories are pitiful. A teenage girl losing their virginity to her biggest crush wouldn't confuse love and sex as badly as these husbands. The author seems borderline obsessed with sex equaling love. Which makes this story an especially stupid one. The wife gives a whole little speech on the topic, even though she is literally standing next to her husband, the man who has just taken her back because he saw her and realised he wanted to fuck her again. Boyish madness. I haven't seen anything to indicate this author understands marriage beyond pussy and looks.

you hit it on the head, he has the biggest whore fetish since Matt M

Was this written by an eighth-grader? No redeeming qualities.

Not one of your better efforts

I have read three stories by this author, but no more. Actually, there are 2 more words that apply: Deadpan. Dispassionate.

Introspective, seemingly intelligent, introspective MCs never show enough happiness while things are all good to make me feel sorry for them when they go bad. Then the introspective MC analyzing his pain NEVER turns to anger for more than a brief moment. I care even less.

Reconciliation requires (for me) some contributory mitigating element. A workaholic inattentive husband, a seduction by a younger man who flatters her, hormone imbalance, mental problems are examples. None of that in this story. This Loving Wife gets into porn and trashes her marriage like a bull in a china shop. Any REAL man would be gone when she got back from LA.

Amazing analysis by HFW. That's totally the vibe I get from this story. Author has some good ones, but this ain't one of them.

But he put more effort in to his comment than the story is worth. You can't write a quality story when the husband fails to act as any normal man would. Before the slut takes the job in LA any husband other than a panty wearing cuck would have put an end to the porn and made it clear that the marriage is on the knife's edge. The minute she says she's going to LA to be on the same set as Ramon, a normal man tells her that her things will be in storage when she returns and that the marriage is over. The plot devices used to create drama aren't remotely credible in this story, and many other LW stories.

I won't go over everything wrong here and in your other stories because Homefront completely knocked it out of the park in his comment.

After reading a couple of your stories I see a sickening pattern forming. So far there is a Porn Star (this story), a Prostitute (The Hermit), and a former Secret Agent/Assassin(?) in Damascus. All of them have cheated on their hubby as well as disrespected them.

NOW FOR A RANT AGAINST SEVERAL AUTHORS ON LITEROTICA......

When writing your stories and evolving your characters many of you are confusing or not truly understanding the concepts of "Making Love" and "Sex". BOTH are fun as hell but when you "Make Love" to that special someone, it overshadows and blows away just "Sex" so greatly it isn't even close. The ONLY things Making Love and Sex have in common is the fact they both are considered

1. A physical activity (unless you just lay there mimicking a dead frog on the road like one of my previous girlfriends from Minneapolis.

2. A Sex Act

3. They are both essentially the same thing when one of the spouses decides to no longer believe in either the verbal oath or spirit of the phrase, "Foresaken All Others".

One final observation.........

When I first started doing P.I. work and investigating Cheating Spouses, mainly Cheating Wives, you had the definite possibility of many of the Cheating Wives making a Brain-Dead mistake and regretting it thereby pleading, begging, and conniving the hubby to take them back.

The very limited caseload I continue to take and Investigate these days has a Cheating Wife being more of a Narcissistic, self-absorbed, spoiled brat that has an Agenda and really isn't overly concerned with who gets trampled (hubby, kids, friends, family, etc.) in the pursuit of their desired plan/goals.

Gone is the worry of "Losing" things like their marriage. They will still feel emotions like anger and sadness but rather for NOT what they have lost, it is instead replaced by what they feel they will gain (new life, new love interest, etc).

When someone commits a "Wrong" you can only deal with them on it for short periods of time until their minds do what is necessary to compartmentalize the hurt they have caused.

Too many commentators miss the point of your tale. They are hung up on the usual types of formats for these "Loving Wife" stories. But you are experimenting. For one, you had fun turning the usual guys-hooked-on-porn-wrecking-a-marriage on its head; the wife is the one afflicted. For the other, you love to set-up an improbable awful circumstance (Here, the wife going off to do one porn movie.) and then do the equally improbable, which is to find a way for hubby and wife to actually get back together. And the fun of it for us readers is to decide just how well you pulled it off--and will it be worthy of a 4 or a 5. This was a 5. Great fun! These guys beating you up for not giving them the same-old-slop, jeepers, how dreary! Don't lower your sights to feed them pablum, persist in having your exquisite, eccentric writing fun! TY!

a tale of two morons doing their thing. beautiful.

It was a new take on an old trope, and I totally loved it.

But

I felt Mike should have moved out when she left for California, and certainly he should have proceeded with the divorce when he got the tape.

Then it could have gone in one of two possible directions. Mike moves on and Ellen goes full bore porn, or Ellen comes home to an ex-husband in the process of totally remaking who he is. Since I'm hard core RAAC, I could see an eventual reconciliation, but Ellen would have had to have gone through hell to win him back. I don't doubt she would succeed eventually as Mike never stopped loving her.

The tale was fun. I gave it a five.

Jedd Clampett (carvohi/FirstBorn374)

After reading about two thirds of your stories something has become quite apparent. No, not that you like to write reconciliation stories. It's the way you try to convince the reader that the reconciliation is a natural consequence. Of course there is the natural "this is my soulmate and I can't get her out of my mind" tactic. But that's common to most RAAC stories.

Your specialty (quirk?) seems to be statements that one or both parties can't see how the other has behaved like they did. You try to hold the characters somewhat blameless, or at least flawed, in acting as they did. This is supposed to lure the reader into accepting the reconciliation more easily. But it's a waste of time - and space.

Readers like the ubiquitous Anonymous and some others will always shout cuck and wimp at RAAC stories. No matter the writers skill. Then there are others, like me actually, that are willing to allow the author some latitude; some suspension of disbelief in allowing the reconciliation to occur. This all in deference to the story as a whole.

Why!!!

Throughout this story every single action or inaction by Mike left me asking that very question. Yes we all know this is the world the author has created and he has every right to play with the rules of cause and effect but in good fantasy there has to be a small kernel of truth in the actions of the protagonists to make any future actions or reactions just a little less preposterous.

Ellen—- “Hey babe I’m gonna star in a porn shoot”

Mike—- “You’ll be served in a couple of days, break a leg”

It might have only been one page but isn’t that a whole lot better and more satisfying outcome lol

That was just sad.

If Gad Saad could read this, he probably consider Mike a feminine man. But you manage to give a convincing story.. I'll give you 5

Just very silly.