All Comments on 'The Power of Touch Ch. 05'

A very good chapter, thanks!

You had my cock hard as a rock. Can'wait for the next hot sexy chpt

Mind Control is a tough genre to get interesting characters into, just due to the nature of the premise. I get that. I kinda expect some focus on plot, as a consequence, though. He's done an awful of controlling people with his power, but all he's actually accomplished is to set himself up in a cushy life. Does he have any goals? Is anyone noticing people's various changes in behavior? Is anyone gossiping about their master? Is the source of his powers relevant to anyone else?

There's no shortage of compelling ways to take this story, despite the lack of characterization. But if all that's going to happen is that he randomly runs across women and has sex with all of them, then that's not cohesive story. It's a series of one-shots that happen to all occur in sequence.

I think uve got good story script but I also think u should put more detail in! Your mind controlling people way to easy? I mean hav them fight u then all of a sudden then they submit to u! B abit aggressive n abusive n show them their place! In the last chapter u ended the chapter when u jus manage to mind controlled reeses mum Lynne! U should hav continued from there n tell us wot u got to know abt her?? U could bring that back n kinda reflect on her daughters marriage maybe get her to breakup the relationship of her daughter with her boyfriend! Hav them two doing an act?? Maybe control the a few teachers from Faye's children school including the head teacher?? Hav one of them coming home to do school work for children n at the same tym entertain Jeff n Faye!! Make the other slaves that jeffs made to come n do housework eg as servants!! Being a story into it!!

Look, I really enjoyed your story. But I have a request for you: don't make them exactly slaves. Maybe add some drama in it or something. Like making a teenage girl get all jealous or something. You know? Some action, drama and adventure. Make it more interesting than the old "touch-and-you're-my-slave" thing.

But overall, it's still good. At least I'm not getting bored of the same idea YET!

I really like how the story is evolving. I'm just wondering when we might get new chapters.

When might we get new chapters.